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3/29/2011 c1 64EmbersAblaze-IgnitedIcicle
Very real. Good job.
3/3/2006 c1 10DrunkenMonkeyKing
Hey, thanks for the review of Echoes of the Dead, sorry, I know how long it took me to get back at ya. Must get better!

Anywho, enough about that, let's get on to why you clicked this little link and check out your new review.

First off, I like the whole imagery you spin with this piece. We get this little scene playing out in our head of someone huddling perhaps in a little cave or something, just feeling kind of lonely and out of things.

I especially like the line where the narrator has to remind herself to breathe. It really reinforces that earlier image we got of a kind of lonely , depressed person.

And then what she's waiting for happens, 'he' walks by, (nice touch also with how he's laughing and smiling, just kinda twists that knife in us more, since we're really feeling for the narrator now).

And then she just slips by, unnoticed. Very sad, but still very beautiful.

A real good job.
12/12/2005 c1 4Alicia Marianne
aww i kno how you feel when people u want 2 notice you just don't...its really frustarting, but you shouldnt let that blind you from the people who want YOU to notice THEM.
11/20/2005 c1 Libby
Aww... I'm so sorry! Put yourself in his world! You rock, chica! never forget.
11/18/2005 c1 37Fantwriter
very pretty

can relate =)
11/18/2005 c1 148Moroni of the Mount of Ro
Yeah ...
11/18/2005 c1 Cooties
Definitely can relate to this. Great job capturing it.

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