for On Heaven's Doorstep2/8/2006 c1 
19Pink Sparrow
oh, don't hate this poem, its really pretty. I love the last few lines. nice work.
19Pink Sparrowoh, don't hate this poem, its really pretty. I love the last few lines. nice work.
1/8/2006 c1 1Changethesubject
simple but effective with some powerful words 'do not mourn for me' - i liked that line. nice work, keep it up.
1Changethesubjectsimple but effective with some powerful words 'do not mourn for me' - i liked that line. nice work, keep it up.
1/4/2006 c1 124in theory
I really like every line, but the "DO not mourn for me please not for long," feels awkward. Maybe it needs a comma, or just a jazzier coat of adjectives or whatever. It just feels out of sync with the smooth grace of the other lines.
124in theoryI really like every line, but the "DO not mourn for me please not for long," feels awkward. Maybe it needs a comma, or just a jazzier coat of adjectives or whatever. It just feels out of sync with the smooth grace of the other lines.
11/30/2005 c1 52Lancealot
Simple yet very intreging. Back to another day I will be to review some more!
52LancealotSimple yet very intreging. Back to another day I will be to review some more!
11/23/2005 c1 13KwazyKandyPie
but it's cute! the ending is great. very spiritual. -kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann-
13KwazyKandyPiebut it's cute! the ending is great. very spiritual. -kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann-
11/23/2005 c1 simpleplan13
it's cute and sweet, but kinda juvenile
it's cute and sweet, but kinda juvenile