for Twilight Sets5/30/2007 c4 
4JellyBeaner
NehemiaH recommended anything by you on her profile, so i decided to give it a try. While I do want to read your other stories, for some reason this one caught my eye. I read it and am certainly glad that I did. I really like this stry so far and I really like Christian. Just a couple of things- there was the part in chapter two at the beginning with the fliers about the king. It's very similar to the paragraph about it in the first chapter, and although I went back and saw that the writing wasn't the same, at first glance I thought it was the same, if that makes ANY sense at all. but other than that, keep up the good job You're an excellent writer and I can't wait for the next installment!
4JellyBeanerNehemiaH recommended anything by you on her profile, so i decided to give it a try. While I do want to read your other stories, for some reason this one caught my eye. I read it and am certainly glad that I did. I really like this stry so far and I really like Christian. Just a couple of things- there was the part in chapter two at the beginning with the fliers about the king. It's very similar to the paragraph about it in the first chapter, and although I went back and saw that the writing wasn't the same, at first glance I thought it was the same, if that makes ANY sense at all. but other than that, keep up the good job You're an excellent writer and I can't wait for the next installment!
5/3/2007 c1 Guest
So it's been over a year since you last updated, which is quite sad. :(
Anyway, hope life's been treating you well. Any chance you got A Perfect Game published?
So it's been over a year since you last updated, which is quite sad. :(
Anyway, hope life's been treating you well. Any chance you got A Perfect Game published?
4/24/2006 c4 vesta-star
hi there!
i absolutely luv this story!it's not cliche at all.i can't wait for more!
update soon!
hi there!
i absolutely luv this story!it's not cliche at all.i can't wait for more!
update soon!
1/3/2006 c4 2Callie Rose
Uh-oh...they should have run away. I knew they should have. Christian brave to contradict his father, when his father obviously has anger management problems.
So far so good. YOu better update soon!
Callie
2Callie RoseUh-oh...they should have run away. I knew they should have. Christian brave to contradict his father, when his father obviously has anger management problems.
So far so good. YOu better update soon!
Callie
12/29/2005 c4 BK
This story reminds me of a perfect game set in midieval times! Except that the mom is nice in this one. I'll always love reading rich-handsome-prince-falls-in-love-with-common-girl-and-they-can't-be-together-because-of-stupid-law-and-mean-dad stories! Your prologue though keeps the reader wondering what sort of drastic action Christian takes! This totally makes me wanna finish my Covet story, but I'm editing World Apart (yet again)Anyway, keep it up, you got me hooked dahling.
This story reminds me of a perfect game set in midieval times! Except that the mom is nice in this one. I'll always love reading rich-handsome-prince-falls-in-love-with-common-girl-and-they-can't-be-together-because-of-stupid-law-and-mean-dad stories! Your prologue though keeps the reader wondering what sort of drastic action Christian takes! This totally makes me wanna finish my Covet story, but I'm editing World Apart (yet again)Anyway, keep it up, you got me hooked dahling.
12/29/2005 c3 BK
Bad me, bad me. I read this chap awhile back and didn't have time to leave a review. But it's so hard to critique a chap that really doesn't need critiquing, but I love the foreshadowing at the end. And I love make-out scenes...hee hee!
Bad me, bad me. I read this chap awhile back and didn't have time to leave a review. But it's so hard to critique a chap that really doesn't need critiquing, but I love the foreshadowing at the end. And I love make-out scenes...hee hee!
12/28/2005 c4 Guest
Noo! I /can't/ believe Clarissa would tell! That's not fair, especially after she was so supportive of Christian wanting to change the marriage law. It makes me mad.
And Leyen is so self-absorbed, I really hate him. At least Abyn had the sense to see that Christian was right. If he was completely like Leyen that'd just be sad.
Aw, Christian and Lena were once again adorable together before they got caught. I love them as a couple, seriously. Leyen BETTER not punish them. (Which is not going to happen, but I can have my little fantasies.)
And you're right, easy is boring. And yep, Rock is being taken good care of; but if you were to write another Trent and Ally I'd let you borrow him, hahaha. I think just including Trent and Ally (and Rock) in Grounded might be enough for now though.
Noo! I /can't/ believe Clarissa would tell! That's not fair, especially after she was so supportive of Christian wanting to change the marriage law. It makes me mad.
And Leyen is so self-absorbed, I really hate him. At least Abyn had the sense to see that Christian was right. If he was completely like Leyen that'd just be sad.
Aw, Christian and Lena were once again adorable together before they got caught. I love them as a couple, seriously. Leyen BETTER not punish them. (Which is not going to happen, but I can have my little fantasies.)
And you're right, easy is boring. And yep, Rock is being taken good care of; but if you were to write another Trent and Ally I'd let you borrow him, hahaha. I think just including Trent and Ally (and Rock) in Grounded might be enough for now though.
12/27/2005 c4 51bangbangstartagain
hey.really good story so far. i love the old cliched stories even though this isnt very cliched. i cant wait for more so please update soon!later daysEM
51bangbangstartagainhey.really good story so far. i love the old cliched stories even though this isnt very cliched. i cant wait for more so please update soon!later daysEM
12/14/2005 c3 22Looking For You
I dig on it..althought I'm not a huge fan of stories like these, I'm definitely enjoying this one... Wanna come over and pull the sword from MY sheath? God, I'm gay. Keep goin'...I like how there's no cliches : )
22Looking For YouI dig on it..althought I'm not a huge fan of stories like these, I'm definitely enjoying this one... Wanna come over and pull the sword from MY sheath? God, I'm gay. Keep goin'...I like how there's no cliches : )
12/12/2005 c3 Guest
Again, loving the Lena/Christian interaction, they're so adorable together. Hopefully Clarissa can get Leyen to change the law! (Although, that might make things too easy for Christian, and judging by the beginning I don't think he's going to have things easy).
I hate Leyen, I really do. Christian's his son: you think he'd had a bit more compassion. *sighs* Oh well, at least Christian has Clarissa to rely on.
Also, sorry my reviews for this have been late; I've been busy.
Again, loving the Lena/Christian interaction, they're so adorable together. Hopefully Clarissa can get Leyen to change the law! (Although, that might make things too easy for Christian, and judging by the beginning I don't think he's going to have things easy).
I hate Leyen, I really do. Christian's his son: you think he'd had a bit more compassion. *sighs* Oh well, at least Christian has Clarissa to rely on.
Also, sorry my reviews for this have been late; I've been busy.
12/12/2005 c2 Guest
Aw, Lena and Christian are so cute together! It really stinks that they can't marry each other, because just by that little reaction you can tell they care for each other so much.
Leyen really seems like an asshole; I hate him almost immediately. Hopefully Christian'll be able to fix the country when he becomes King; it's really noble (I think that's the word I want) that he saves all the posters.
And don't worry, it's not cliche at all!
Aw, Lena and Christian are so cute together! It really stinks that they can't marry each other, because just by that little reaction you can tell they care for each other so much.
Leyen really seems like an asshole; I hate him almost immediately. Hopefully Christian'll be able to fix the country when he becomes King; it's really noble (I think that's the word I want) that he saves all the posters.
And don't worry, it's not cliche at all!
12/12/2005 c1 Phoenix
Whew!Well written, but a bit too bloody in my opinion. Very descriptive, YAY!;)
Whew!Well written, but a bit too bloody in my opinion. Very descriptive, YAY!;)
12/12/2005 c3 2Callie Rose
Christian's so cute...makes me wonder what's going to happen, though I have a bad feeling...Still wondering about the prologue...I'll have to think on that one for a while...
2Callie RoseChristian's so cute...makes me wonder what's going to happen, though I have a bad feeling...Still wondering about the prologue...I'll have to think on that one for a while...
12/6/2005 c2 BK
First off all, let's define cliche: something that's been done before. Well...we all know that all stories come from previous ideas either in life or movies or books, so in that sense everything is cliche!
So the moral? Don't apologize for being cliche, only apologize for being cliche if the summary of your story invovles any of the following words, "bet, popular, or high school."
Otherwise, you'd better keep this story coming...you totally inspired me to pick up my writing again!
Love you! BK
First off all, let's define cliche: something that's been done before. Well...we all know that all stories come from previous ideas either in life or movies or books, so in that sense everything is cliche!
So the moral? Don't apologize for being cliche, only apologize for being cliche if the summary of your story invovles any of the following words, "bet, popular, or high school."
Otherwise, you'd better keep this story coming...you totally inspired me to pick up my writing again!
Love you! BK
12/3/2005 c2 SwtMorningStar
Ohh, very nice. I like it a lot, and their relationship is very cute.
One question though-was the prologue a scene from the present [ie at the same general time of the 1st chapter] or was it a scene from how things will someday turn out?
Ohh, very nice. I like it a lot, and their relationship is very cute.
One question though-was the prologue a scene from the present [ie at the same general time of the 1st chapter] or was it a scene from how things will someday turn out?