for Shadows on Lonely Paths12/8/2005 c1 
5RedHairedWriter
"Crystal tears fall as rainBlackness rises with pain"And"Fading into blackStaring into shadows"I like the most; I know I should look at the poem as a whole... And as a whole it's excellent.
5RedHairedWriter"Crystal tears fall as rainBlackness rises with pain"And"Fading into blackStaring into shadows"I like the most; I know I should look at the poem as a whole... And as a whole it's excellent.
12/3/2005 c1 30candyaddict
wow, I adore your imagery. Your rhyming is great too. This sounds gothic and angsty to me, but I like it anyway. I especially like the colours you use, if that sounds right. like dapple. I have no idea why, but colours that don't use the usual words you use to describe them really strike me.
30candyaddictwow, I adore your imagery. Your rhyming is great too. This sounds gothic and angsty to me, but I like it anyway. I especially like the colours you use, if that sounds right. like dapple. I have no idea why, but colours that don't use the usual words you use to describe them really strike me.
12/1/2005 c1 111Crimson-Fantasy
i like the mesures you used in this poem it has beautiful lyrical value as well as a strongly expressed range of emmotion.
111Crimson-Fantasyi like the mesures you used in this poem it has beautiful lyrical value as well as a strongly expressed range of emmotion.
12/1/2005 c1 229TheBrokenWanderer
that was so vivid...I loved it...it gave me a little shiver...
~TheBrokenWanderer~
229TheBrokenWandererthat was so vivid...I loved it...it gave me a little shiver...
~TheBrokenWanderer~
11/30/2005 c1 858Anna178
I really think you ended this well with the final line. It simply seems to wrap it all up, which is something I really like in a poem, I hate to be left hanging...of course theres a way to do that well to, lol. Anyway, brilliant poem.
ANNA
858Anna178I really think you ended this well with the final line. It simply seems to wrap it all up, which is something I really like in a poem, I hate to be left hanging...of course theres a way to do that well to, lol. Anyway, brilliant poem.
ANNA
11/28/2005 c1 47Cornelia Poe Ittree
partial darkness obscured with the light of reality. i can relate.
47Cornelia Poe Ittreepartial darkness obscured with the light of reality. i can relate.
11/27/2005 c1 19Pink Sparrow
Wow, I love this. Love the rhyming and just everything. Especcially love the second stanza. Nice work!
19Pink SparrowWow, I love this. Love the rhyming and just everything. Especcially love the second stanza. Nice work!
11/27/2005 c1 124in theory
Hehe I read your bio, it was fun. This has a great style, and a steady/smooth rhythm that's so easy to read. I like a lot.
124in theoryHehe I read your bio, it was fun. This has a great style, and a steady/smooth rhythm that's so easy to read. I like a lot.
11/27/2005 c1 1Changethesubject
ohh i love the way you write. you capture such emotion and...expressions in your writing. i adore it. its going on my favourites list.
1Changethesubjectohh i love the way you write. you capture such emotion and...expressions in your writing. i adore it. its going on my favourites list.
11/23/2005 c1 157darkmistresslae
Oh. I like it. The imagery was good... same with the feeling. The emotion and everything was all there. One thing struck me as odd though... and I dont know if you meant to do it or not... the first stanza had an A rhyming scheme, where the others all had an ABCB scheme. I like the poem the way it is... I just though I'd point that out to you **in case** you wanted to change it. Nice poem!
157darkmistresslaeOh. I like it. The imagery was good... same with the feeling. The emotion and everything was all there. One thing struck me as odd though... and I dont know if you meant to do it or not... the first stanza had an A rhyming scheme, where the others all had an ABCB scheme. I like the poem the way it is... I just though I'd point that out to you **in case** you wanted to change it. Nice poem!