
11/26/2005 c1
24she's not breathing
i LOVE that. it tells of something cruel and evil, really. but it's so real. everything shies from the real. this just tells it, and doesn't offer any apology. and it's captivating for it, beautiful for it. you wrote about something that happens to so many people, something so many people did, and yet you made it kind of new and still kept it rather objective, as if you're telling someone else's story even though it's in first person. brilliant work. that ending was strong. and i loved the part about her being just a doll for you. because you get that image a lot from the other POV, the person being used. not the person being the user. =D
~k8

i LOVE that. it tells of something cruel and evil, really. but it's so real. everything shies from the real. this just tells it, and doesn't offer any apology. and it's captivating for it, beautiful for it. you wrote about something that happens to so many people, something so many people did, and yet you made it kind of new and still kept it rather objective, as if you're telling someone else's story even though it's in first person. brilliant work. that ending was strong. and i loved the part about her being just a doll for you. because you get that image a lot from the other POV, the person being used. not the person being the user. =D
~k8