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11/30/2005 c1 Commador Claus
Very good story here, I like the idea of a man so down he'll act as a lab rat, always intruiging. A few things, however, seemed off. First, when Gambles walks into the office, is he judged by a man or a woman, (there were refrences to both gender in the same sentence). And secondly, I think you could have used more description when talking about the hospital - decreped, diseased, gilded, rotting, ect. Overall though, great story. I hope Gambles gets the hair and money he so needs, (and hopefully the hair will be on his head).

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