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7/3/2008 c1 lazyalice
It's like a glimpse into someone's stream of consciousness. Very personal and emotional. This piece is rather sad, but I admire the honesty.
1/7/2006 c1 12Pyrgus
Very very powerful.I liked this so much. wow... *tear and a smile that tells all.*
12/14/2005 c1 Pixie
Wow, That is so cool. I loved it. It totally captures the concept of it all.Luvs,Your Best Friend
12/4/2005 c1 8Shang Warrior Phoenix
I absoloutely love this poem and every time i read it it gets better. I still think you should get it published because it would be accepted for sure.
12/2/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
that's terribly sad...i have a rocky relationship with my father myself and though i can't identify perfectly with this i know where you're coming from. beautiful piece of writing.
11/30/2005 c1 68Jesse Jacob
I like the way this reads. It is very spontanious. I found that the faster I read it, the better it sounded...if that makes any sense. Good work.
11/30/2005 c1 75clockwork kiss
nice but simple, which works here. i like the cyclical format, fits with the spinning/round theme.

"And I feel as if the clouds are spinning

In an endless circle

Around a frozen world."

-great imagery here!

i also like the sporadic rhyming. overall, nice work.

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