for Rejected by you4/16/2006 c1 angelicdust
aw.*sob*. dats soo sad.:(.. dats hw guys r neways..ive got a frnd.. who feels da exact same way it gets even worse wen dat guy says he luvz u ! :(...it kinda always gewts dat way!... guys go bonkers! y cant they just luv da prsn who luv sdem! ;).. ok now dats kinda impossible..nice wrk eitherway! cheers!
aw.*sob*. dats soo sad.:(.. dats hw guys r neways..ive got a frnd.. who feels da exact same way it gets even worse wen dat guy says he luvz u ! :(...it kinda always gewts dat way!... guys go bonkers! y cant they just luv da prsn who luv sdem! ;).. ok now dats kinda impossible..nice wrk eitherway! cheers!
2/9/2006 c1 R-amgiory
Very good poem my friend, In case u do not know why am I calling you friend, is because I am one of your best riends, liamlover. I have subscribe to this wepage to submitt some stories that i started.
Very good poem my friend, In case u do not know why am I calling you friend, is because I am one of your best riends, liamlover. I have subscribe to this wepage to submitt some stories that i started.
1/15/2006 c1 Decollage
It feels like rhymed couplets all together... interesting, simplistic in an elegant way.
The rhyme scheme seemed to constrict you a bit, forcing you to use words that fit syllabically with the rhyme, but that's a fairly common shortcoming of simple-rhyme. It wasn't too noticable here, however, and the general format is nice.
The last two lines are fantastic.
It feels like rhymed couplets all together... interesting, simplistic in an elegant way.
The rhyme scheme seemed to constrict you a bit, forcing you to use words that fit syllabically with the rhyme, but that's a fairly common shortcoming of simple-rhyme. It wasn't too noticable here, however, and the general format is nice.
The last two lines are fantastic.
1/9/2006 c1 
35Cool-Ruzz
oh my god, i feel you! I, too, have been rejected, many times actually. But like they say, you get some, you lose some. But it does hurt, having the one you love, simply, just walk away. I love this poem, its beautiful poetry. So I hope you'll keep writing. Do review my work if you had the time. Love, Ruzz
35Cool-Ruzzoh my god, i feel you! I, too, have been rejected, many times actually. But like they say, you get some, you lose some. But it does hurt, having the one you love, simply, just walk away. I love this poem, its beautiful poetry. So I hope you'll keep writing. Do review my work if you had the time. Love, Ruzz
12/6/2005 c1 8Riouichi Nagashiri
This is a pretty good start. Some of the lines could use some work. It's overall really good. In a couple of places it seemed like you were really trying to make the lines work. When that happens to me, I take a little break, look at whatever inspired me in the first place, and read over what I have. It's a good work and I like it, but every one could use constructive critisizm.
~Rio
8Riouichi NagashiriThis is a pretty good start. Some of the lines could use some work. It's overall really good. In a couple of places it seemed like you were really trying to make the lines work. When that happens to me, I take a little break, look at whatever inspired me in the first place, and read over what I have. It's a good work and I like it, but every one could use constructive critisizm.
~Rio