3/27/2007 c3 ham3
Hi! I read Chapter 2-The Joys of Being Kidnapped. I liked it. You're good at writing action. BUt the dialogue was a little awkward; your characters have strange ways of saying things. (well, maybe it's because you and I come from different parts of the world...where are you from?)

Anyways, it looks like you haven't been on fictionpress since December 2005...do you plan to post more chapters/ new stories?

6/28/2006 c9 Ck90
*Pouts* I understand if you can't update for reasons known only to you. First I would like to say that I am not mad or angry in any way, just a little worried and exited about what will happen to this story. Will you finish it? Have you abandoned it? I really must say that I miss leaving meaningful reviews and I want to keep on reading the story. But alas, nothing is ever predictable. I really wish you would update before August 8 because I start classes that day. And I would really love and update becasue you said that this story would go by fast because you had it all planned out. I am not in anyway upset, I just felt like reading the next chapter.

2/2/2006 c1 4Ck90
You should reallyl update or else people will start to think youleft us.

12/13/2005 c9 saisjura
I apologize for making my review to long

Yeah, sometimes, when we're bored in some of our classes we talk about stories that we've read in fictionpress, Like yours for example; I had yours in my 'going to read ' folder (where I stick a lot of the stories that, I have read the summary and it has, seemed appealing to me), but then CK told me that she'd read it and that she'd liked it; so I read it too. Yeah and I like to leave long reviews, I just like the author to have a good lengthily response to their stories; after all that’s their guide to whether the story is appealing to the readers (*smiles*)

on another note: I really, extremely, liked this chapter... don't know hat you talking about when you say(and yes i will quote you!): "Hmm... Not too sure I liked that chapter." you mixed quite a few things together and it came out excellent... let me make myself clear(and not rambling, to help me I’ll make a list)

Things that you have to improve: nothing really, I (as my personal opinion) like your style of writing.

Things I didn’t like about this chapter: you didn’t put Tom (starts crying)..how could you? After you said that she was going to have a lesson with him! Her moms is dying (q for the extensive no) no…

things I liked: the insert of a new possible guy (that could like Sarah in the future)and thus make things more complicated (oh the joys of the love square. not triangle!), the pointing out of the servants needing to gossip.. and then that gossip being completely wrong when you had already convinced the reader that it was the most probable thing that happened, the jealousy sparks emitting from Christian...lol, uh there's gonna be a ball (whoho!) Love the idea! I love it when they have a Masquerade Ball in the story (starts celebrating); her mom… sick….no….poor girl (I know you had to do it, it was an exiting and yet heart sinking moment in the story)…. But seriously looking forward to the ride home Sarah is gonna have to SHARE with Christian… lol… It’s gonna be an interesting ride.

I had read in a review left by another person that they said that maybe Sarah should have a bad dream and that she should crawl into Christian’s bed… I really think you should put that! it would be a hilarious scene, but instead of Sarah being the one that crawls into Christian’s bed, maybe you should put (q for integrating how the scene could be) that Sarah’s having a Bad premonition in her dream, and then she wakes up in the morning all shaken up (because of the rough nightmare a.k.a. premonition), and then she feels something warm around her, she looks and theirs a hand across her waist (her eyes are about to pop out of her sockets), she looks and there’s Christian in HER bed and with HIS arm around her (handsomely) fast asleep…lol… and then she snaps, throw him out of bed, he wakes up, explains that he had simply heard her screaming and had gone over to sooth her while she was asleep and had fallen asleep himself!

Ha! Lol… and then if you wanna add effect then you could make this happen before they leave , and that way there’s an awkward tension between the two of them…

Ha! I’m evil… and I write too much (dam almost a complete page in word)… I’m gonna stop now…

Well if you’re ever in a writer’s block or need any help… CK90 and me are always willing to help… we’re just an e-mail away! Lol… Hope you post soon!

12/12/2005 c9 SkepticCritic
People of Earth, The Universe, and everything in existance, hear my proclamation. I hereby darn all authors fond of cliffies straight to heck...where they still hopefully have computers so you can keep updating...

ehehehehehehehehehe...guess who had way too much sugar today? and guess who's knee is totally screwed up and had to wear a knee brace all day? and guess who keeps mispelling knee and having to erase it and retype it? if you hadn't already guessed the answer is.

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ergh...ok come on...please? i do so love spoilers...i just can't help myself...please tell me? *turns puppy dog eyes on full blast*...*adds in cute whimpers and cocks head for added effects*...come on...ya know you want to...

when do you add in our correct guess? i really do want to see sarah and fin's faces...how about right before they go? then it can be their "excuse" and that's why he's coming home with her and that's why he's traveling with her...still not sure how they're going to explain why they kidnapped her but...

fin's actually rather cute sometimes...i mean christian...darn it...i will get it through my head eventually...christain christain ! there...maybe now it'll sink in...or maybe not...anyways, its break hurry it up...or i shall darn to heck faster! wow...that was so scary wasn't it? ...

12/11/2005 c8 SkepticCritic
i do hope i didn't read wrong and that it was Ck90's guess that the king'll announce that sarah and fin, sorry christian, are to be "married" is what you were talking about being right...i'm not sure that i really care either way whether you move it or not...i'll keep reading no matter where it is because i look in both sections for my reading...although i must say the stories in fantasy on average seem to be better written...just look at their summaries..all of them are more than a line long, most use proper grammar and spelling, and most actually have hooking summaries...but the romances are known for generally having happy endings if the sub-genre is not angst or drama...personally, i think either one would probably be fitting (do you see what i'm hinting here? that a)you write well and b)i'm crossing my fingers rather hard for a happy ending...) anyway, i'm not sure how i managed to miss the first update...i clicked on the story and found there was not one but TWO chapters i had not written...don't know how i missed it...i'm usually so vigilant when it comes to this kind of thing...oh well...at least i did find it...

12/11/2005 c8 BangBangYourDead
Wow.. that's weird..