for Creatures of the Night: The Miami WereBat2/14/2006 c2 
8BadSweets
Excellent! I killed myself laughing, especially after her reaction to him being a were-bat. Very good comedic writing style ^_^
Aww, so cute... can't wait for Darren's story! I am intrigued by Orange Shirt.
8BadSweetsExcellent! I killed myself laughing, especially after her reaction to him being a were-bat. Very good comedic writing style ^_^
Aww, so cute... can't wait for Darren's story! I am intrigued by Orange Shirt.
2/14/2006 c1 BadSweets
LOL! Brian and September's exchanges are hilarious. I love them XD September herself is such a comedic personality...
LOL! Brian and September's exchanges are hilarious. I love them XD September herself is such a comedic personality...
2/13/2006 c2 1tekkiedolphin
hey hon, fyi for someone who doesnt like french you use it quite a bit...great story...look to hear from me soon I am ready to get back out there...
1tekkiedolphinhey hon, fyi for someone who doesnt like french you use it quite a bit...great story...look to hear from me soon I am ready to get back out there...
2/12/2006 c2 40Death Princess
was darren the leader? the 1 mel was going 2 go after? oh and he's not going 2 suck them all dry is he? i hope not. thtd be mean. i luved the bit about batman, tht was so funny. and september is so weird. funny but weird. in a bit of a ditzy way. cumon ur being chased by evil villains and all u can do is laugh.
brians a bit of a showoff tho wat with the flip at the end. so typically male. brians sensitivity on not bein a vamp was cracking me up. he sounded like a little kid. so adorable. bless. anyways well done on another vey well written story. only complaint i had was tht there were quite a few typos in this chapter.
40Death Princesswas darren the leader? the 1 mel was going 2 go after? oh and he's not going 2 suck them all dry is he? i hope not. thtd be mean. i luved the bit about batman, tht was so funny. and september is so weird. funny but weird. in a bit of a ditzy way. cumon ur being chased by evil villains and all u can do is laugh.
brians a bit of a showoff tho wat with the flip at the end. so typically male. brians sensitivity on not bein a vamp was cracking me up. he sounded like a little kid. so adorable. bless. anyways well done on another vey well written story. only complaint i had was tht there were quite a few typos in this chapter.
2/12/2006 c2 Kjersti
That was so sweet! And very funny. I loved it. :)
That was so sweet! And very funny. I loved it. :)
2/12/2006 c2 11Tzotel431
That was awesome! thanks for updating! I can't wait for Darren's story! I'll be waiting!
~Tzotel
11Tzotel431That was awesome! thanks for updating! I can't wait for Darren's story! I'll be waiting!
~Tzotel
2/11/2006 c2 4Stylo
Oh yay!
I love this story! It's so amazingly sweet. It has all the components of an amazing one: fighting, vampires, romance, and [albeit dumb] bad guys.
Yay you! Good job, really.
4StyloOh yay!
I love this story! It's so amazingly sweet. It has all the components of an amazing one: fighting, vampires, romance, and [albeit dumb] bad guys.
Yay you! Good job, really.
2/11/2006 c2 writtenreality
gorgeous, fantastic, love it!
xx
gorgeous, fantastic, love it!
xx
2/11/2006 c2 1Brighde
Haha, that was simply perfect; a really great short story with a nice ending (a hard thing to pull off I've noticed- though you did it very well :D)
You're really great at developing a solid plot while inserting a whole bunch of humour along the way, heh, you certainly had me laughing! I love how "Mitch" (_ too good) was always all dramatic and they were really just laughing at him. Ooh, and this was one of my favourite lines:
"Yeah, but the plot does," but could just have well have been "Yeah, cut the snot, cuz." *laugh* Brilliant.
Finally, I really liked the ending itself, as I mentionned before. It's just so sweet and cute with the whole "you forgot" part :D
Righteo, so keep up the great work, can't wait to read more from you :)
-B. Blum
1BrighdeHaha, that was simply perfect; a really great short story with a nice ending (a hard thing to pull off I've noticed- though you did it very well :D)
You're really great at developing a solid plot while inserting a whole bunch of humour along the way, heh, you certainly had me laughing! I love how "Mitch" (_ too good) was always all dramatic and they were really just laughing at him. Ooh, and this was one of my favourite lines:
"Yeah, but the plot does," but could just have well have been "Yeah, cut the snot, cuz." *laugh* Brilliant.
Finally, I really liked the ending itself, as I mentionned before. It's just so sweet and cute with the whole "you forgot" part :D
Righteo, so keep up the great work, can't wait to read more from you :)
-B. Blum
2/11/2006 c2 10JojoAnn
I love your writing style and Septembers sence of humor is hilarious! I hope to read some more of your stories. Preferably longer...full length possibly?
See ya.
10JojoAnnI love your writing style and Septembers sence of humor is hilarious! I hope to read some more of your stories. Preferably longer...full length possibly?
See ya.
2/11/2006 c2 Bob n Kazzi
Very good. I enjoyed this one shot a lot. I hope to see these two in Darren's story. Well done.
Very good. I enjoyed this one shot a lot. I hope to see these two in Darren's story. Well done.
2/11/2006 c2 Jaz108
LOVED IT!
It was hilaroius!
LOVED IT!
It was hilaroius!
2/7/2006 c1 11Tzotel431
This was really good! You said you had a second part? where is it! I want to read it! Please post it as soon as you can! It is great!
This would also make a good story too!
~Tzotel
11Tzotel431This was really good! You said you had a second part? where is it! I want to read it! Please post it as soon as you can! It is great!
This would also make a good story too!
~Tzotel
2/5/2006 c1 5the littlest sakura
um... is it finished? b/c it's way after the date u published and therre isn't antoher chappie :P *plz* update! anything! (i'm hooked on all ur stories so it's all good ;D)
5the littlest sakuraum... is it finished? b/c it's way after the date u published and therre isn't antoher chappie :P *plz* update! anything! (i'm hooked on all ur stories so it's all good ;D)