for Creatures of the Night: The Miami WereBat1/29/2006 c1 
1pep-queen
This story is great so far, but. . .where's the rest? I'm looking forward to reading the next part.
1pep-queenThis story is great so far, but. . .where's the rest? I'm looking forward to reading the next part.
1/24/2006 c1 ThornyBlackHeart
THIS WAS HILLARIOUS!
Wow... a bunch of my friends started to read it with me during class and we got a big kick out of the humor...
Sorry if it wasn't supposed to be that way...
Great job...
-Black Rose
THIS WAS HILLARIOUS!
Wow... a bunch of my friends started to read it with me during class and we got a big kick out of the humor...
Sorry if it wasn't supposed to be that way...
Great job...
-Black Rose
1/8/2006 c1 LivingHell
Absolutely Awesome! You've practically inspired me to go out and write my own short story, cause usually i'm not a big fan of those and i know i can't write no matter what, but THat was absolutely amazing. and you said you'd update in a week but its already been a MONTH!
Update, all the readers are anxiously waiting.
Absolutely Awesome! You've practically inspired me to go out and write my own short story, cause usually i'm not a big fan of those and i know i can't write no matter what, but THat was absolutely amazing. and you said you'd update in a week but its already been a MONTH!
Update, all the readers are anxiously waiting.
1/7/2006 c1 Faye-san
haha i likes it,...alots...:P
haha i likes it,...alots...:P
12/27/2005 c1 chaos
i love this.
i love this.
12/23/2005 c1 1JC Jaquez
yay for one-shots! my favorite type of writing, ever. this made me laugh =P I liked the part about the carpets. and just the way this is written... still laughing
1JC Jaquezyay for one-shots! my favorite type of writing, ever. this made me laugh =P I liked the part about the carpets. and just the way this is written... still laughing
12/19/2005 c1 Im just jin
i loved the ending part to that chap. It was really funny. Its interesting because you dont ususally read something with werebats so its unusual but i like it. Its different. ^^ btw, i love your other stories. too ! So please update this story (the other half) !
i loved the ending part to that chap. It was really funny. Its interesting because you dont ususally read something with werebats so its unusual but i like it. Its different. ^^ btw, i love your other stories. too ! So please update this story (the other half) !
12/15/2005 c1 meechiyel
I really liked this one shot. Do you think that you could make longer story out of it? I would love that.
I really liked this one shot. Do you think that you could make longer story out of it? I would love that.
12/15/2005 c1 13Grace Hsia
Lol! This is hilarious! The story line (or at least where it is leading) is brilliant. It really is quite amazing, fascinating, and tantalizing. There are hilarious bits in this story, and it is exceptionally well-written. This cannot possibly be a simple one shot! Not only that, but the characters are dynamic, interesting, and unique as snowflakes. (What can I say? It's the holiday season!) The main character, September, is exceptionally witty. The story is written about her in a way that makes the reader feel involved, as though they personally know September. And Brian...he's a were-bat. That is definitely a twist! Lol, not a vampire, but a were-bat. It is quite a hilariously ironic twist on things, as certain parts lead the reader to think Brian is a vampire. The story is excellent so far, and I bloody well want you to continue it!
Smart critic comment part is now over, and here are my normal comments: Holy crap! You are really creative, you know that? September...that is a pretty name! And, when reading this story, I definitely saw sparks fly and fireworks going caboom when I read the part where Brian and September first meet! Loved this story so far, don't leave it as a one-shot! Please continue it!
Much luv, and cheers!
~Orient Fox
p.s. merry christmas!
13Grace HsiaLol! This is hilarious! The story line (or at least where it is leading) is brilliant. It really is quite amazing, fascinating, and tantalizing. There are hilarious bits in this story, and it is exceptionally well-written. This cannot possibly be a simple one shot! Not only that, but the characters are dynamic, interesting, and unique as snowflakes. (What can I say? It's the holiday season!) The main character, September, is exceptionally witty. The story is written about her in a way that makes the reader feel involved, as though they personally know September. And Brian...he's a were-bat. That is definitely a twist! Lol, not a vampire, but a were-bat. It is quite a hilariously ironic twist on things, as certain parts lead the reader to think Brian is a vampire. The story is excellent so far, and I bloody well want you to continue it!
Smart critic comment part is now over, and here are my normal comments: Holy crap! You are really creative, you know that? September...that is a pretty name! And, when reading this story, I definitely saw sparks fly and fireworks going caboom when I read the part where Brian and September first meet! Loved this story so far, don't leave it as a one-shot! Please continue it!
Much luv, and cheers!
~Orient Fox
p.s. merry christmas!
12/14/2005 c1 Ren
Hilarious. I must say, I'm happy you wrote this instead of working on your college applications. Good work.
Hilarious. I must say, I'm happy you wrote this instead of working on your college applications. Good work.
12/11/2005 c1 6c4rm3n
jeez, i've missed your writing, it's very articulate. And I loved this! It twas fab, I tell you. Love September (that is a BYOOTIFUL name), love Brian, love everything!
Can't wait for the next part! Come to think of it, shouldn't the next part be up already? Blah, whatever. Great stuff!
xx
6c4rm3njeez, i've missed your writing, it's very articulate. And I loved this! It twas fab, I tell you. Love September (that is a BYOOTIFUL name), love Brian, love everything!
Can't wait for the next part! Come to think of it, shouldn't the next part be up already? Blah, whatever. Great stuff!
xx
12/5/2005 c1 5aqua-angel
Aww... so it's only a one-shot? This was really good. It captured my attention the entire time and throughout the whole chapter, there was an element of weirdness. LoLz, I mean the advertising as well, for some reason your story reminded me of that short story The Lottery. Minus the stoning and all. Very well-written and funny! I love it =)
Happy writings!
5aqua-angelAww... so it's only a one-shot? This was really good. It captured my attention the entire time and throughout the whole chapter, there was an element of weirdness. LoLz, I mean the advertising as well, for some reason your story reminded me of that short story The Lottery. Minus the stoning and all. Very well-written and funny! I love it =)
Happy writings!
12/5/2005 c1 6MizSphinx
I'm begging you PLEASE PLEASE P-L-E-A-S-E...continue this! Please don't cut it as short as two chapters! It really has the makings of a really great story: three tablespoons of action/adventure, three teaspoons of humor and two teaspoons of romance (if you want, you could add a dash/pinch of suspense to make it thoroughly complete!)
ANYwho, I don't care what you think, all I know is that I'm down on my knees-on hot coals if you want it!-begging you please to turn it into a story!
Mentally Malfunctioned,
SoulfulRepentance
6MizSphinxI'm begging you PLEASE PLEASE P-L-E-A-S-E...continue this! Please don't cut it as short as two chapters! It really has the makings of a really great story: three tablespoons of action/adventure, three teaspoons of humor and two teaspoons of romance (if you want, you could add a dash/pinch of suspense to make it thoroughly complete!)
ANYwho, I don't care what you think, all I know is that I'm down on my knees-on hot coals if you want it!-begging you please to turn it into a story!
Mentally Malfunctioned,
SoulfulRepentance