for A creature of Bitterness2/5/2006 c1 
2Sheila Ibre
honestly? the last two lines didn't seem to tally with the whole thing. think i get what you're trying to say that you are "bitterness" but there's something that's missing. needs a bit more revision there. But that's just my opinion. I just thought that you notched the arrow, let it fly but missed by a few nanometres. hehe.. Keep Writing, tho!
2Sheila Ibrehonestly? the last two lines didn't seem to tally with the whole thing. think i get what you're trying to say that you are "bitterness" but there's something that's missing. needs a bit more revision there. But that's just my opinion. I just thought that you notched the arrow, let it fly but missed by a few nanometres. hehe.. Keep Writing, tho!
1/29/2006 c1 31none of burt's beeswax
You have a really unique voice, and you really brought this new edge to something that is seem often (someone being their own worst enemy). Amazing imagery.
31none of burt's beeswaxYou have a really unique voice, and you really brought this new edge to something that is seem often (someone being their own worst enemy). Amazing imagery.
12/11/2005 c1 15j.u.s.t. .f.o.r. .m.e
omigosh, this poem is awesome, even if it is a break from your normal style, it's great! i luv the picture you painted of bitterness and how it was you in the end :D
15j.u.s.t. .f.o.r. .m.eomigosh, this poem is awesome, even if it is a break from your normal style, it's great! i luv the picture you painted of bitterness and how it was you in the end :D
12/11/2005 c1 14kit feral
It introduces itselfIts name is Bitterness
I look into the mirrorAnd see me
Very nice. The descriptions were awesome- though creepy. But this has a underlying tone of romantic hope to me... then again, I'm slightly insane. (Lol.) Anyway, great work, keep it up!
14kit feralIt introduces itselfIts name is Bitterness
I look into the mirrorAnd see me
Very nice. The descriptions were awesome- though creepy. But this has a underlying tone of romantic hope to me... then again, I'm slightly insane. (Lol.) Anyway, great work, keep it up!
12/9/2005 c1 879Moondog Dozier
great lines in this,"Leering at me-Its grey bat wings-Folded around itself", The ending is excellent. Very descriptive and consciously describes the internal conflict of the duality of the self.
879Moondog Doziergreat lines in this,"Leering at me-Its grey bat wings-Folded around itself", The ending is excellent. Very descriptive and consciously describes the internal conflict of the duality of the self.
12/9/2005 c1 155Shadowed Mind
I like how you've created a character and added imagery for bitterness, it works well. The last two lines are excellent. keep writing and stay strong. all my love, shadowed mind
155Shadowed MindI like how you've created a character and added imagery for bitterness, it works well. The last two lines are excellent. keep writing and stay strong. all my love, shadowed mind
12/8/2005 c1 28plethora of mind
Hi! I decided to check your page out, and I really like this. I'll probably read more of your work later, but as I'm on my way out to do some Christmas shopping, this is all I have time for! This is just...wonderful. I love it.
28plethora of mindHi! I decided to check your page out, and I really like this. I'll probably read more of your work later, but as I'm on my way out to do some Christmas shopping, this is all I have time for! This is just...wonderful. I love it.
12/8/2005 c1 2Viera Wing
Whoa...if you truly are describing yourself...then, whoa. That was intense. Are you writing about who you are, or are you describing the darker side of people, you, us?Anyway, thanks for the review. Means something to me that I can actually write, you know, something.So, yeah, I'm done.
2Viera WingWhoa...if you truly are describing yourself...then, whoa. That was intense. Are you writing about who you are, or are you describing the darker side of people, you, us?Anyway, thanks for the review. Means something to me that I can actually write, you know, something.So, yeah, I'm done.
12/7/2005 c1 1Changethesubject
this is good, well done. very powerful imagery. i liked the last two lines.
1Changethesubjectthis is good, well done. very powerful imagery. i liked the last two lines.