for As I Lay Dying5/16/2006 c1 
14method acting
Hey hey hey...isn't this the name of an iffy band? Iffy being an adjective. Meaning not-so-hot. Right. Well. Irrevlevant.I like this. This is nice. Topic's not so much to my fancy, but good metaphors and descriptions and all of that. Real vivid like. Intense. Fine job. I'm tired. So sorry for the short review.
14method actingHey hey hey...isn't this the name of an iffy band? Iffy being an adjective. Meaning not-so-hot. Right. Well. Irrevlevant.I like this. This is nice. Topic's not so much to my fancy, but good metaphors and descriptions and all of that. Real vivid like. Intense. Fine job. I'm tired. So sorry for the short review.
5/3/2006 c1 20D Byron
I really liked this poem, although it's not the sort of genre I normally appreciate. The way you express the feelings is very imaginative; I found myself wondering if you'd had a near-death experience.
I especially loved the contradiction in the line: "And just as I was about to end the cacophony of noise in my head to spread the wordThe silence was shattered"That was so very clever.
20D ByronI really liked this poem, although it's not the sort of genre I normally appreciate. The way you express the feelings is very imaginative; I found myself wondering if you'd had a near-death experience.
I especially loved the contradiction in the line: "And just as I was about to end the cacophony of noise in my head to spread the wordThe silence was shattered"That was so very clever.
3/8/2006 c1 25Ajax Elpis
Awesome poem. I haven't read many poems lately were the poet could make the words flow so well and stay in sync with the thought that it is bound to. The one qualm I have with this poem is the "fishes" part. That part sort of slowed down the way in which I was reading it. After that however it seemed to pick right back up and the imagery was great. Large words work great in poetry, and you use them to great effect. I dislike it when people use slang and other such words, it seems to lessen the poem, but you keep a sort of elegence in your poems. Definately keep up your work.
25Ajax ElpisAwesome poem. I haven't read many poems lately were the poet could make the words flow so well and stay in sync with the thought that it is bound to. The one qualm I have with this poem is the "fishes" part. That part sort of slowed down the way in which I was reading it. After that however it seemed to pick right back up and the imagery was great. Large words work great in poetry, and you use them to great effect. I dislike it when people use slang and other such words, it seems to lessen the poem, but you keep a sort of elegence in your poems. Definately keep up your work.
2/2/2006 c1 13Pyreflei
Very pretty. I like this one; it has an air of... I'm not quite sure about it, but it's somewhat romantic as well as a rather lonely-sounding goodbye.
13PyrefleiVery pretty. I like this one; it has an air of... I'm not quite sure about it, but it's somewhat romantic as well as a rather lonely-sounding goodbye.
12/9/2005 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
I really love you're tone of voice through out this; it really evolved and came alive for me. One of the better religious poems that I've read in a long time. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietI really love you're tone of voice through out this; it really evolved and came alive for me. One of the better religious poems that I've read in a long time. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.