for Dream12/12/2005 c1 Fmog
I like the format of the poem, but even though I can see you want it to be short, there is a lot lacking.
Here a couple ideas to juggle when you revise:
What is your dream-self like?What do you think the world would be like if this was a dream?How do you differ from your dream-self and "actual" self?
Good start.
-Suchikri
I like the format of the poem, but even though I can see you want it to be short, there is a lot lacking.
Here a couple ideas to juggle when you revise:
What is your dream-self like?What do you think the world would be like if this was a dream?How do you differ from your dream-self and "actual" self?
Good start.
-Suchikri