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2/27/2008 c1 22MadMorrow
Cute and enjoyable poem. I have to agree with another reader though, not really liking that last line. I don't think it has to be spelled out as being a kid, more like the innocent joy of life. Maybe change it to something like "I am life's innocence."
6/28/2007 c1 deo.volente
sweet!
12/15/2005 c1 22Lucid Nonsense
Very nice. It gets the point across and sets the playful, slightly nostalgic mood effectively, yet is still very concise. The first two stanzas had a nice rhyme/rhythym, but it would sound better if you hadn't lost the rhyme in the final stanza.

Anyway, all in all, very well done!
12/12/2005 c1 hey maria
"I am an eggplant shunner" I adored that. :)

Good, good, but the last line seemed a little off. You could just write "I am always a kid" or something. Great job.

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