for robin's egg1/6/2006 c1 hoowdoideletethisaccount
Hmm, those first three lines are just... stunningly powerful. They shocked me right off, and caught my attention. They're resoundingly foreboding. Did you write those lines as well, or was it a quote? Just curious, because of the italics and the way those lines are somewhat seperate from the rest of the piece.
This is a solidly tragic poem. "He / so falling-teacup delicate / china blue shatter on unforgiving tiles" I loved these lines, they captured his vulnerability, his fragile need and how easily he is broken.
The purgatory line.. no remorse.. a rejection of the idea of wavering between redemption and destruction? Interesting.
I love the use of the word "porcelain". That is such a beautiful word, and yet so few people use it. I love the idea of a porcelain smile-frozen, perfect, fake.
My interpretation of this poem, is a metaphorical biography; a movingly-written eulogy of someone's inner state. I really felt this piece. You have an elegantly effective touch. You pulled this off with shining colours, man. Nicely done!
Hmm, those first three lines are just... stunningly powerful. They shocked me right off, and caught my attention. They're resoundingly foreboding. Did you write those lines as well, or was it a quote? Just curious, because of the italics and the way those lines are somewhat seperate from the rest of the piece.
This is a solidly tragic poem. "He / so falling-teacup delicate / china blue shatter on unforgiving tiles" I loved these lines, they captured his vulnerability, his fragile need and how easily he is broken.
The purgatory line.. no remorse.. a rejection of the idea of wavering between redemption and destruction? Interesting.
I love the use of the word "porcelain". That is such a beautiful word, and yet so few people use it. I love the idea of a porcelain smile-frozen, perfect, fake.
My interpretation of this poem, is a metaphorical biography; a movingly-written eulogy of someone's inner state. I really felt this piece. You have an elegantly effective touch. You pulled this off with shining colours, man. Nicely done!
12/24/2005 c1 
612simpleplan13
interesting.. powerful and beautifully described... great format.. awesome poem
612simpleplan13interesting.. powerful and beautifully described... great format.. awesome poem
12/23/2005 c1 80citrus scented
soo blindingly beautiful. the flow of images, contrasting soft to hard to sweet and beautiful- to broken and destroyed. this is wonderful mix, very thoughtprovoking.
80citrus scentedsoo blindingly beautiful. the flow of images, contrasting soft to hard to sweet and beautiful- to broken and destroyed. this is wonderful mix, very thoughtprovoking.
12/12/2005 c1 78myheartiswaypastbeating
I really like the style you used in this poem really familar, but not unoriginal. Well done. myheartiswaypastbeating
78myheartiswaypastbeatingI really like the style you used in this poem really familar, but not unoriginal. Well done. myheartiswaypastbeating