for The sea ate my soul2/3/2007 c1 
44Rig Creon
i think it's been said about 20 times, but with this many writers in about 20 different ways. In short I'll make it simple as you did but, sadly not as profound,
"that was purty"
Smiles :)
44Rig Creoni think it's been said about 20 times, but with this many writers in about 20 different ways. In short I'll make it simple as you did but, sadly not as profound,
"that was purty"
Smiles :)
12/31/2006 c1 14Leighanna
Your poetry is lovely and so sad. I hope you continue writing, for it makes me thoughtful to read your words. By the way, Thank you for your review.
14LeighannaYour poetry is lovely and so sad. I hope you continue writing, for it makes me thoughtful to read your words. By the way, Thank you for your review.
11/27/2006 c1 78Ironic Presence
I like its simplicity. It's overall a really good poem, and I don't have anything negative to say about it. I like the second half better than the first half, though. Good job.
78Ironic PresenceI like its simplicity. It's overall a really good poem, and I don't have anything negative to say about it. I like the second half better than the first half, though. Good job.
8/2/2006 c2 64Arwen Starfire
Great summary or whatever ya wanna call it. It summed up the circumstances perfectly. I dont remember the word "pray" in the poem, though. did ya add it?
64Arwen StarfireGreat summary or whatever ya wanna call it. It summed up the circumstances perfectly. I dont remember the word "pray" in the poem, though. did ya add it?
4/6/2006 c1 11Werelynx
This poem in particular, though short, is one of my favorites. It's got rhythm, and the "one pearl teardrop" painted a picture in my head.
11WerelynxThis poem in particular, though short, is one of my favorites. It's got rhythm, and the "one pearl teardrop" painted a picture in my head.
4/6/2006 c1 145dfgsfdghftgt44
Very nice. It's a beautiful image, almost dream-like in quality. The rhyme was also done very well. It was hard to pick up on the first time I looked this over, but I caught it the second time. That makes this even more amazing because a good rhyming poem isn't necessarily an obvious rhyme. (Shakespear rhymed, but tried not to make it obvious.) Amazing job!
~Cirien Phoenix
P.S. Thank you for the review on "The Little Wildflower Girl."
145dfgsfdghftgt44Very nice. It's a beautiful image, almost dream-like in quality. The rhyme was also done very well. It was hard to pick up on the first time I looked this over, but I caught it the second time. That makes this even more amazing because a good rhyming poem isn't necessarily an obvious rhyme. (Shakespear rhymed, but tried not to make it obvious.) Amazing job!
~Cirien Phoenix
P.S. Thank you for the review on "The Little Wildflower Girl."
3/19/2006 c1 200the big sleep
This is a gorgeous poem, however I felt the transition of "tore it in two/In two? What a cliche" wasn't needed, and a bit jarring/antithetical to the poem itself. That being said, it was beautifully written. I love short poetry, and especially the last line in this really sold the deal for me. Again, that delicate touch that was so prevalent in your most recent submission. And this, of course: "And it melted into glass/One pearl teardrop"
Excellent, and stunning. You haven't nearly enough submissions. I demand more.
200the big sleepThis is a gorgeous poem, however I felt the transition of "tore it in two/In two? What a cliche" wasn't needed, and a bit jarring/antithetical to the poem itself. That being said, it was beautifully written. I love short poetry, and especially the last line in this really sold the deal for me. Again, that delicate touch that was so prevalent in your most recent submission. And this, of course: "And it melted into glass/One pearl teardrop"
Excellent, and stunning. You haven't nearly enough submissions. I demand more.
3/15/2006 c1 1KyuubiANBU
i would say short and sweet, but the others have done that for me('.') good poem though, short and sweet, like it!
1KyuubiANBUi would say short and sweet, but the others have done that for me('.') good poem though, short and sweet, like it!
3/4/2006 c1 69Around.about
I wasn't sure what to expect from this poem... but I liked it simple and elegant.
great work,~Sejse~
69Around.aboutI wasn't sure what to expect from this poem... but I liked it simple and elegant.
great work,~Sejse~
2/1/2006 c1 128Annoying as Hell
Wow. It's so short and kind of simple, but I love the imagery. For some reason the word graceful comes to mind. I just really like it!
128Annoying as HellWow. It's so short and kind of simple, but I love the imagery. For some reason the word graceful comes to mind. I just really like it!
1/31/2006 c1 26Chi Ame
I loove this one! "My soul was but a grain of sand/And it melted into glass" What cool imagery! Great job.
26Chi AmeI loove this one! "My soul was but a grain of sand/And it melted into glass" What cool imagery! Great job.
1/5/2006 c1 87R.J. Crosbie
Hey, "Rasberry," it's me again! So you put this poem in the spritual category as well. I guess it is. I liked where this poem went after the first line!
87R.J. CrosbieHey, "Rasberry," it's me again! So you put this poem in the spritual category as well. I guess it is. I liked where this poem went after the first line!