for Expected Tears, Unknown Fears12/28/2005 c1 finished
wow, i think i can really relate to this...i say 'i think' because i don't want to assume what you were thinking and feeling when you wrote this, but i feel like i can really relate to the message i got from this. it was great.
wow, i think i can really relate to this...i say 'i think' because i don't want to assume what you were thinking and feeling when you wrote this, but i feel like i can really relate to the message i got from this. it was great.
12/20/2005 c1 
22lucid-psyche
Good piece - you can definitely feel the raw emotions of the speaker.
My only nitpicks are that once or twice you switch from the present tense into the past tense and back again, and you also occasionally put an unnecessary space between a word and its punctuation. Little things, really.
Again, this was excellent. You captured the speaker's voice well, for the most part. Keep writing. :-)
22lucid-psycheGood piece - you can definitely feel the raw emotions of the speaker.
My only nitpicks are that once or twice you switch from the present tense into the past tense and back again, and you also occasionally put an unnecessary space between a word and its punctuation. Little things, really.
Again, this was excellent. You captured the speaker's voice well, for the most part. Keep writing. :-)
12/14/2005 c1 a lonely september
this was so sad. it made me want to cry. beautiful. keep writing. always.
this was so sad. it made me want to cry. beautiful. keep writing. always.
12/14/2005 c1 7vanderhall
okay. this one... this one is sad. and so good. moving, really. as stupid as that sounds, it was moving. I wish i could know more about it, about where it all came from. loved it, as always.
7vanderhallokay. this one... this one is sad. and so good. moving, really. as stupid as that sounds, it was moving. I wish i could know more about it, about where it all came from. loved it, as always.