
2/27/2009 c1
21servatis-a-pereculum
AH! Wonderful last line! "i'm a !secret! slut" and how you connected that with snowflakes.

AH! Wonderful last line! "i'm a !secret! slut" and how you connected that with snowflakes.
1/28/2009 c3
167all you need is oxygen
the way you write is unlike anything i've ever read before.it's strange, in the best possible way.
"i have no reasons to say no : god guaranteed us redemption, anyway." - amazing.

the way you write is unlike anything i've ever read before.it's strange, in the best possible way.
"i have no reasons to say no : god guaranteed us redemption, anyway." - amazing.
4/30/2006 c4
83Prevaricate
You're brilliant.
I've read several of your pieces now, and most I can't review because I can't think of anything to say.
Speechless is a good thing.

You're brilliant.
I've read several of your pieces now, and most I can't review because I can't think of anything to say.
Speechless is a good thing.
1/19/2006 c4
73Jezsh
I think this is painful more than beautiful, very your style. A line I really liked is 'when raindrops start to slap our cotton-covered skin', almost like it is chiding them...I love the raw emotion in your writing (know i've probably said it before but really!)

I think this is painful more than beautiful, very your style. A line I really liked is 'when raindrops start to slap our cotton-covered skin', almost like it is chiding them...I love the raw emotion in your writing (know i've probably said it before but really!)
1/18/2006 c4 a lonely september
oh this is so beautiful. each word is so perfect. are you going to continue? it's gorgeous.
oh this is so beautiful. each word is so perfect. are you going to continue? it's gorgeous.
1/18/2006 c1 a lonely september
(but i caught the snowflakes in my mouth because kisses on the cheek are n e v e r enough, and i’m a !secret! slut).i absolutely adore that line.
(but i caught the snowflakes in my mouth because kisses on the cheek are n e v e r enough, and i’m a !secret! slut).i absolutely adore that line.
1/18/2006 c4
15I wish i could fly
oh shit. that's what i thought when i read that last line, sentence. this is beautiful, and heartbreaking, even though something about it feels like it's not quite supposed to be. amazing.

oh shit. that's what i thought when i read that last line, sentence. this is beautiful, and heartbreaking, even though something about it feels like it's not quite supposed to be. amazing.
1/18/2006 c4
88multiples of six
WOW.. have I ever mentioned I love your writing? In particular, "Let me defile you," and "God guaranteed us redemption, anyway." And the "secret slut" - I know *all* about that. This was pretty frikkin great.

WOW.. have I ever mentioned I love your writing? In particular, "Let me defile you," and "God guaranteed us redemption, anyway." And the "secret slut" - I know *all* about that. This was pretty frikkin great.
1/3/2006 c2
236mezzie
so pretty and hurting just the way the prettiest things always seem to rip at the heart. I'm not sure that sentence made sense but anyway... this makes my heart sigh.
mezzie

so pretty and hurting just the way the prettiest things always seem to rip at the heart. I'm not sure that sentence made sense but anyway... this makes my heart sigh.
mezzie
12/26/2005 c1
879Moondog Dozier
This glides from light images to dark images so well. You really set the reader up well for the ending to be unexpected. Good write.

This glides from light images to dark images so well. You really set the reader up well for the ending to be unexpected. Good write.
12/25/2005 c2
20sloppy firsts
the first one seems magical and gritty ( if that combination is possible ) and the second one is pure enchantment.

the first one seems magical and gritty ( if that combination is possible ) and the second one is pure enchantment.
12/24/2005 c2
94smile persephone
Orgasmic with a tinge of slutbeauty. Two beautifully written pieces; the style is perfect. The imagery is hazy and faint, just like the subjects of both. Love(ly).

Orgasmic with a tinge of slutbeauty. Two beautifully written pieces; the style is perfect. The imagery is hazy and faint, just like the subjects of both. Love(ly).
12/24/2005 c1
70elvenstorm
Hehe love this poem it's so innocent yet not at the same time. Not sure if you meant for the formatting to be like that but love your choice of words. Keep it up!

Hehe love this poem it's so innocent yet not at the same time. Not sure if you meant for the formatting to be like that but love your choice of words. Keep it up!