for Flufforama12/30/2005 c3 
7yarrowicefrost
Nice:) nothing wrong with a little more fluff in the world :D. Personally,I liked the 2nd chapter better but that's just me. ..
7yarrowicefrostNice:) nothing wrong with a little more fluff in the world :D. Personally,I liked the 2nd chapter better but that's just me. ..
12/29/2005 c3 4Mice 12
I have to say, that this chapter is so much better written that the first and second ones. Plus, it's in first person! First person is a good way to personally get to know the character. It shows the character's views and opinions and this chapter seems realistic. I like the hypocrisy. Amazing what crushes can do. Heh. You should elabrorate more on Swing Choir. The chaaracter talks about how much he or she (Even though, you think it's a she...and that person is actually you...oh well) hates this or that, there should be something about what it's actually about. Like Swing Choir, what is the character doing in Swing Choir? But this chapter makes a good drabble, all in all. Erm...I should stop. So I bid you adieu, and keep up the good writing.Arisu
4Mice 12I have to say, that this chapter is so much better written that the first and second ones. Plus, it's in first person! First person is a good way to personally get to know the character. It shows the character's views and opinions and this chapter seems realistic. I like the hypocrisy. Amazing what crushes can do. Heh. You should elabrorate more on Swing Choir. The chaaracter talks about how much he or she (Even though, you think it's a she...and that person is actually you...oh well) hates this or that, there should be something about what it's actually about. Like Swing Choir, what is the character doing in Swing Choir? But this chapter makes a good drabble, all in all. Erm...I should stop. So I bid you adieu, and keep up the good writing.Arisu