for Mascara12/18/2008 c23 
9Chem-is-trying
:-)
I've been reading this basically the entire day. ^_^ Quite glad I did, too.
At first, I was agreeing with you, about not wanting the happy ending. But the more I read, the more I didn't want a sad ending just because I didn't want to cry. And we know it's not happily-ever-after. Something will happen, but I like to think they get over it, no?
Anywho, I liked it. ^_^
If I can unglue my eyes from my laptop, I'll look to see if you have anything else tomorrow.
In the mean time, I'll be hoping school isn't canceled (yeah, get that) because then I have to miss the "big-family-Christmas" because I'll be making up my Econ exam. ;-) Iron, no? Heh.
Sorry. Loved the story!
(Keep writing)
~Kelsey
9Chem-is-trying:-)
I've been reading this basically the entire day. ^_^ Quite glad I did, too.
At first, I was agreeing with you, about not wanting the happy ending. But the more I read, the more I didn't want a sad ending just because I didn't want to cry. And we know it's not happily-ever-after. Something will happen, but I like to think they get over it, no?
Anywho, I liked it. ^_^
If I can unglue my eyes from my laptop, I'll look to see if you have anything else tomorrow.
In the mean time, I'll be hoping school isn't canceled (yeah, get that) because then I have to miss the "big-family-Christmas" because I'll be making up my Econ exam. ;-) Iron, no? Heh.
Sorry. Loved the story!
(Keep writing)
~Kelsey
10/25/2008 c23 16Spurious
ooh, that was indeed pretty! even made my headache.. if not go away, then at least fade. much love. wonderful story.
16Spuriousooh, that was indeed pretty! even made my headache.. if not go away, then at least fade. much love. wonderful story.
9/21/2008 c23 34keiiah
Wow! What a great story! I love the images that you use repetitively, especially. The one about the rain was very nice, amd so was the fairytale one. Woah, both Peter's and Andy's families are quite messed up, huh? I hoped to see Peter confront more things for some kind of change in his character towards the end, but I guess the ending now is quite nice also. Glad to know that Sam wasn't what Peter thought he was.
Well done~
34keiiahWow! What a great story! I love the images that you use repetitively, especially. The one about the rain was very nice, amd so was the fairytale one. Woah, both Peter's and Andy's families are quite messed up, huh? I hoped to see Peter confront more things for some kind of change in his character towards the end, but I guess the ending now is quite nice also. Glad to know that Sam wasn't what Peter thought he was.
Well done~
9/9/2008 c23 3Duuude
YES! YAY! HOORAY!
I thought the ending was going to be a pissy "fine" from our dear main character but he actually told him he loved him!
Beautiful story and ending. Andy's an amazing character.
GREAT STORY. I'm in love. 0_0
Thanks. =)
3DuuudeYES! YAY! HOORAY!
I thought the ending was going to be a pissy "fine" from our dear main character but he actually told him he loved him!
Beautiful story and ending. Andy's an amazing character.
GREAT STORY. I'm in love. 0_0
Thanks. =)
8/11/2008 c23 13sNiCKeTFiRE
i read this entire story as you were posting it and i don't believe i ever actually reviewed it. but i rarely log in to this account but this is the one the alert was sent through so i'm reviewing under this name!
i read the summary of the story and it was the complete opposite of stories i usually read and review, but honestly, it was the title that intrigued me to the point where i just had to start reading. and, well, in case you couldn't guess, i read the first chapter and was hooked. so doubly good job cause this is the only story like this i have ever read =]
your writing is amazing, which i'm sure you hear (or read rather) all the time. keep up the good work. i see you have several other stories so maybe one day when i take a second to relax i'll read one of them!
a reviewer just did this to me so i feel inclined to mimic their actions...i hope you're doing well and enjoying your time writing as much as i, and the rest of your reviewers, enjoy reading your works!
13sNiCKeTFiREi read this entire story as you were posting it and i don't believe i ever actually reviewed it. but i rarely log in to this account but this is the one the alert was sent through so i'm reviewing under this name!
i read the summary of the story and it was the complete opposite of stories i usually read and review, but honestly, it was the title that intrigued me to the point where i just had to start reading. and, well, in case you couldn't guess, i read the first chapter and was hooked. so doubly good job cause this is the only story like this i have ever read =]
your writing is amazing, which i'm sure you hear (or read rather) all the time. keep up the good work. i see you have several other stories so maybe one day when i take a second to relax i'll read one of them!
a reviewer just did this to me so i feel inclined to mimic their actions...i hope you're doing well and enjoying your time writing as much as i, and the rest of your reviewers, enjoy reading your works!
8/2/2008 c23 Lady75
Love the story ^_^
love the charictar ^_^
love the ending 'happy ending' indeed ^_^
love you~ fir writing the story ^_^
THNX~
Love the story ^_^
love the charictar ^_^
love the ending 'happy ending' indeed ^_^
love you~ fir writing the story ^_^
THNX~
8/1/2008 c23 Evo
I love this story. Love the characters, especially Andy and Peter. I just... really, really hope there was more! It's probably not likely, but I still hope for a sequel *_*
I love this story. Love the characters, especially Andy and Peter. I just... really, really hope there was more! It's probably not likely, but I still hope for a sequel *_*
7/28/2008 c23 5Wordistic
Dude seriously, adorable. I love the way it ends and I love Peter. He is awesome.
5WordisticDude seriously, adorable. I love the way it ends and I love Peter. He is awesome.
7/16/2008 c23 45TopKat
I fucking loved this.
The little tangents at the start of almost every chapter, the controversial mohawk (what's not to love?), Peter being one of those 'depressed types' i usually hate but that was so utterly loveable, Andy just...because he's andy. Sam The Faggot, the delusional chapter where everything just about came out (poor peter, poor Red!) And also because it's just so...Hicksville chic.
The setting is just about my favourite part, because i can imagine it and smile.
Really hoping you've got some other stories on here, because this was a joy and a pleasure to read. And it didn't even feel like shameless self-gratification! A rare thing in stories like (but not similar to) this. :D
45TopKatI fucking loved this.
The little tangents at the start of almost every chapter, the controversial mohawk (what's not to love?), Peter being one of those 'depressed types' i usually hate but that was so utterly loveable, Andy just...because he's andy. Sam The Faggot, the delusional chapter where everything just about came out (poor peter, poor Red!) And also because it's just so...Hicksville chic.
The setting is just about my favourite part, because i can imagine it and smile.
Really hoping you've got some other stories on here, because this was a joy and a pleasure to read. And it didn't even feel like shameless self-gratification! A rare thing in stories like (but not similar to) this. :D
7/14/2008 c23 71Subbie
I read this story in TWO days... that's how good it is!
And I love how you have the story dotted with the quote from Tom, the plankton quote.
The only thing that I felt was missing from the story was Peter telling Andy about Red. Could you maybe do a oneshot just about that? For me, plz? *puppy dog eyes*
I don't know if your planning on doing a sequel or not, but I'm definatly going to read it if there is!
71SubbieI read this story in TWO days... that's how good it is!
And I love how you have the story dotted with the quote from Tom, the plankton quote.
The only thing that I felt was missing from the story was Peter telling Andy about Red. Could you maybe do a oneshot just about that? For me, plz? *puppy dog eyes*
I don't know if your planning on doing a sequel or not, but I'm definatly going to read it if there is!
7/3/2008 c23 10Andra Sashner
This story, despite being in first person (which seems to comprise the majority of the stories I read these days *sheesh*), is surprisingly possessive. A lot of first-person stories speak in terms of first person but are very monologue-like and bore the living daylights out of me... can't deal with that. Your character Peter was a little shaky but easy to relate to. Very human and very confused, like all the other poor sods who walk this earth.
Andy made my day; I loved him. His characters was a little shaky as well but I appreciated his young and crazy persona -he's just a wild card from a messed up background. Another starring role in his own tragedy -angsty without being too heavy and just enough that we can see things close enough to his perspective to appreciate his little "cracks". He's not as stable as anyone else in the story but he was certainly quite amusing.
Your dialogue was hilarious in some places! Just the conversations the characters had was entertaining as anything. I like how they react to each other and inter act they had a tone of acceptable outrageousness; people a reader could relate to yet still step back and say, "f*ck, he's insane!"
I think what really threw me off the characters was the incident with Henry. It was a really gritty part of the story and I didn't really like that and neither can I see the point for the characters to have gone through that or done what they did. There didn't seem to be a purpose to that scene.
I love that you threw in more real-life problems for the; Peter's family and his father's death, Andy's lack of a father but the complexities of his relationship to his now-dead step father. I loved Cassandra to bits, that precocious little snarky brat, she's a great character.
Other than a few loose scenes that I totally didn't get, this fic was beautiful. Happy writing and thanks for sharing.
10Andra SashnerThis story, despite being in first person (which seems to comprise the majority of the stories I read these days *sheesh*), is surprisingly possessive. A lot of first-person stories speak in terms of first person but are very monologue-like and bore the living daylights out of me... can't deal with that. Your character Peter was a little shaky but easy to relate to. Very human and very confused, like all the other poor sods who walk this earth.
Andy made my day; I loved him. His characters was a little shaky as well but I appreciated his young and crazy persona -he's just a wild card from a messed up background. Another starring role in his own tragedy -angsty without being too heavy and just enough that we can see things close enough to his perspective to appreciate his little "cracks". He's not as stable as anyone else in the story but he was certainly quite amusing.
Your dialogue was hilarious in some places! Just the conversations the characters had was entertaining as anything. I like how they react to each other and inter act they had a tone of acceptable outrageousness; people a reader could relate to yet still step back and say, "f*ck, he's insane!"
I think what really threw me off the characters was the incident with Henry. It was a really gritty part of the story and I didn't really like that and neither can I see the point for the characters to have gone through that or done what they did. There didn't seem to be a purpose to that scene.
I love that you threw in more real-life problems for the; Peter's family and his father's death, Andy's lack of a father but the complexities of his relationship to his now-dead step father. I loved Cassandra to bits, that precocious little snarky brat, she's a great character.
Other than a few loose scenes that I totally didn't get, this fic was beautiful. Happy writing and thanks for sharing.
6/28/2008 c8 4Deadly-moons
This is kind of weird, but apparently Yo Quiero taco bell also translates in spanish as 'I want i mark bell' cause aparently taco translates as 'i mark'. I looked it up in two different places.
Other than that, i really love your story. I think i've already put it on my favorites. (this is my second time reading it through.)
4Deadly-moonsThis is kind of weird, but apparently Yo Quiero taco bell also translates in spanish as 'I want i mark bell' cause aparently taco translates as 'i mark'. I looked it up in two different places.
Other than that, i really love your story. I think i've already put it on my favorites. (this is my second time reading it through.)
6/27/2008 c23 3moneymakestheworldgoround
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rly enjoyed reading this. :) very nice. i like the ending.
only, there were lots of things that i thought couldve been cleared up. such as the john incident. i reckoned if that was cleared up with peter and andy knowing about it it'd be better. but overall, very nice. ^^
3moneymakestheworldgoround:]
rly enjoyed reading this. :) very nice. i like the ending.
only, there were lots of things that i thought couldve been cleared up. such as the john incident. i reckoned if that was cleared up with peter and andy knowing about it it'd be better. but overall, very nice. ^^