for Mascara1/17/2007 c7 Chrysler
Harry and Peter's realtionship is intruiging, I really like it. Andy is bad news for real? Huh, he seems harmless besides the back and forth banters, but after all, like Harry said, Peter IS an asshole. Shit, henry, hahaha, Peter messed me up. Their relationship is really fucked up, especially in chapter 7. They don't act like most couples do. Like for one thing, Andy should've gone to see Peter even if he wasn't there, and wouldn't have been at a strip club and Peter not calling is normal, but...I dunno. It's an interesting, hawt, relationship though
Harry and Peter's realtionship is intruiging, I really like it. Andy is bad news for real? Huh, he seems harmless besides the back and forth banters, but after all, like Harry said, Peter IS an asshole. Shit, henry, hahaha, Peter messed me up. Their relationship is really fucked up, especially in chapter 7. They don't act like most couples do. Like for one thing, Andy should've gone to see Peter even if he wasn't there, and wouldn't have been at a strip club and Peter not calling is normal, but...I dunno. It's an interesting, hawt, relationship though
1/17/2007 c4 Chrysler
He is good. Once that guys said he never knew his father, i would've been apologizing not retorting.Oh I get it...Sam and Tom are the bickering gay guys, and Andy's the bully? I'm so sad...you never give a tinsy bit of action. Is that the rules here on Fictionpress? Lol, just his luck. He winds up working with his ex. Damn, Cindy had been a real bitch in the past, taking advangtage of him like that. I like the constant...the constant reminder of his mom, of his fear of facing this, the hands in the pocket, it makes it so much realistic, and I just love the internal conflict.
He is good. Once that guys said he never knew his father, i would've been apologizing not retorting.Oh I get it...Sam and Tom are the bickering gay guys, and Andy's the bully? I'm so sad...you never give a tinsy bit of action. Is that the rules here on Fictionpress? Lol, just his luck. He winds up working with his ex. Damn, Cindy had been a real bitch in the past, taking advangtage of him like that. I like the constant...the constant reminder of his mom, of his fear of facing this, the hands in the pocket, it makes it so much realistic, and I just love the internal conflict.
1/17/2007 c2 Chrysler
Lol, Peter is hilarious! Just over all hilarious and vicious. But he just got dumped, and love does that to you. Haha then the sexy stranger comes in-there was the reason why he shouldn't have looked at him. That whole thing seemed like a game of survival int he wild...all the hidding, thinking of where the other was, when he'd attack, when to escape. Cute. He's playing dumb, lol, tormenting him. How cruel. Is he the sexy guy picking on him? What's his name? Have you told us? Anywho, WOOT! He'll be waiting. Can't wait.
Lol, Peter is hilarious! Just over all hilarious and vicious. But he just got dumped, and love does that to you. Haha then the sexy stranger comes in-there was the reason why he shouldn't have looked at him. That whole thing seemed like a game of survival int he wild...all the hidding, thinking of where the other was, when he'd attack, when to escape. Cute. He's playing dumb, lol, tormenting him. How cruel. Is he the sexy guy picking on him? What's his name? Have you told us? Anywho, WOOT! He'll be waiting. Can't wait.
1/17/2007 c1 Chrysler
Lol, this chapter is so pessimistic, is it not? But that's life for you, not a whole bed of roses. I love how you started this out, instead of just coming straight out with the break up. It's nice. Lol, his girlfriends a piece of work too. And tom's got some...interesting parties going there, I wonder if there's a secret code or something, for those who "understand". Straight men performing "gay activies" to get away from it all...WHAT A RIOT! I love it though, I do-gives me a feel of Bablyon from Queer as folk-except they were all gay. Oh, a rockers voice. I love mystery man already. That man is very pretty-I hope he's the on e he stick with already, something's gonna change, I can feel it. Maybe he becomes an asshole, whatever, but I hope he stays with him in the end, but I'm not gonna worry too much during the ride with those two men you mentioned in your summary. Maybe he's one of them. Hahaha, he's a snake, bringing up the ring like thta!
Lol, this chapter is so pessimistic, is it not? But that's life for you, not a whole bed of roses. I love how you started this out, instead of just coming straight out with the break up. It's nice. Lol, his girlfriends a piece of work too. And tom's got some...interesting parties going there, I wonder if there's a secret code or something, for those who "understand". Straight men performing "gay activies" to get away from it all...WHAT A RIOT! I love it though, I do-gives me a feel of Bablyon from Queer as folk-except they were all gay. Oh, a rockers voice. I love mystery man already. That man is very pretty-I hope he's the on e he stick with already, something's gonna change, I can feel it. Maybe he becomes an asshole, whatever, but I hope he stays with him in the end, but I'm not gonna worry too much during the ride with those two men you mentioned in your summary. Maybe he's one of them. Hahaha, he's a snake, bringing up the ring like thta!
1/9/2007 c23 bansira
Amazing! I love this story so much! x3
The characters are so adorable, even those who have a very short 'play-time' xD; I really love love love LOVE it so much!
Keep up the great work
Amazing! I love this story so much! x3
The characters are so adorable, even those who have a very short 'play-time' xD; I really love love love LOVE it so much!
Keep up the great work
1/5/2007 c23 
19Lavender-Drop
This was brilliant! I love it SO much; you have done a wonderful job. I really can’t put to words how great this is. All of Peter’s opening thoughts or side thoughts were great. I don’t know if I was supposed to find it funny but I nearly cried I was laughing so hard at the Taco Bell part… and the emotions hit home. Thank you…. I just have one question: how the hell did you think up the chapter titles?
19Lavender-DropThis was brilliant! I love it SO much; you have done a wonderful job. I really can’t put to words how great this is. All of Peter’s opening thoughts or side thoughts were great. I don’t know if I was supposed to find it funny but I nearly cried I was laughing so hard at the Taco Bell part… and the emotions hit home. Thank you…. I just have one question: how the hell did you think up the chapter titles?
12/1/2006 c1 24Limited Edition
Very catchy beginning. Arises many questions and it' just generally interesting.
I think the warning in the beginning is completely unecessary. As a writer and artist you have the right to write whatever the fuck you want. And I think the setting and POV should be made clear by the story itself o.O
I'm so happy to find out that this isn't one of those overrated fics that gets so many reviews simply because they have the most cute and clichéd plotlines ever. Nah, it's bold, it's like...high fashion XD It's not as original as avant garde, but it's at least haute couture
The story progresses incredibly nicely, I like the smooth switches in time. There isn't much description, but somehow I get the picture anyway; the style is well developed. I get more and more excited by every sentence, so much suspense, so many questions! It's clear that there is effort behind it, but the trick is to make the effort not show. Somehow though...it's very safe. There isn't much that could be bashed simply because people misunderstand.
Why do I imagine Tom to be gray-haired and bald and have a beer belly? So gay, it's all just...so gay XD
The way the girl is portraid(sp?) is very clichéd for a slash fic, I don't like that.
It really is FUCKING Braveheart soundtrack. It's only nice to hear live, you can't play it on CD _
Mental note: When attending orgies, bring an extra set of clothes.
extract my cell phone...sounds...weird.
I love how the narrator is developed, he really IS a guy. Guys never ever think about what they did wrong, they just drown their sorrows and whine until they get over it, or the other part gets over it. In the call, his feelings are shown more clear and it's more obvious that it's him being bitter and not her being a bitch, well she might be a bitch but not the clichéd bitch. She's just a normal girl. Good job!
24Limited EditionVery catchy beginning. Arises many questions and it' just generally interesting.
I think the warning in the beginning is completely unecessary. As a writer and artist you have the right to write whatever the fuck you want. And I think the setting and POV should be made clear by the story itself o.O
I'm so happy to find out that this isn't one of those overrated fics that gets so many reviews simply because they have the most cute and clichéd plotlines ever. Nah, it's bold, it's like...high fashion XD It's not as original as avant garde, but it's at least haute couture
The story progresses incredibly nicely, I like the smooth switches in time. There isn't much description, but somehow I get the picture anyway; the style is well developed. I get more and more excited by every sentence, so much suspense, so many questions! It's clear that there is effort behind it, but the trick is to make the effort not show. Somehow though...it's very safe. There isn't much that could be bashed simply because people misunderstand.
Why do I imagine Tom to be gray-haired and bald and have a beer belly? So gay, it's all just...so gay XD
The way the girl is portraid(sp?) is very clichéd for a slash fic, I don't like that.
It really is FUCKING Braveheart soundtrack. It's only nice to hear live, you can't play it on CD _
Mental note: When attending orgies, bring an extra set of clothes.
extract my cell phone...sounds...weird.
I love how the narrator is developed, he really IS a guy. Guys never ever think about what they did wrong, they just drown their sorrows and whine until they get over it, or the other part gets over it. In the call, his feelings are shown more clear and it's more obvious that it's him being bitter and not her being a bitch, well she might be a bitch but not the clichéd bitch. She's just a normal girl. Good job!
10/20/2006 c1 12Mical Alexander
Okay, so maybe you don't care about reviews now that this is complete and you already have like 300 of them, but... whatever. I'm posting one anyway.
You're a horse-person, aren't you? Just guessing, because as a horse person myself, I have this insatiable urge to bring horses into every story. And, well, after reading the bit about Peter falling into the stall of a cute little arab, I thought to myself: "now here's an author that shares my priorities." If I'm wrong about this, you're going to think I'm crazy, but I just thought I'd put it out there. ^_^
Anyway, I also just have to tell you that your fic is just generally awesome. I really, really like the way you write your character's expressions. I can actually picture their faces. The best one was after the horse party with Cindy when Peter started crying. The imagery blew me away. When it comes down to it, your whole fic is like that, I guess. It's really real.
The crash scene was truamatic for me. I thought you were going to kill Andy off. I actually yelled explitives, and may or may not have woken up my flatmate. I'm SO glad that it all ended happily. Thank-you for this fic!
12Mical AlexanderOkay, so maybe you don't care about reviews now that this is complete and you already have like 300 of them, but... whatever. I'm posting one anyway.
You're a horse-person, aren't you? Just guessing, because as a horse person myself, I have this insatiable urge to bring horses into every story. And, well, after reading the bit about Peter falling into the stall of a cute little arab, I thought to myself: "now here's an author that shares my priorities." If I'm wrong about this, you're going to think I'm crazy, but I just thought I'd put it out there. ^_^
Anyway, I also just have to tell you that your fic is just generally awesome. I really, really like the way you write your character's expressions. I can actually picture their faces. The best one was after the horse party with Cindy when Peter started crying. The imagery blew me away. When it comes down to it, your whole fic is like that, I guess. It's really real.
The crash scene was truamatic for me. I thought you were going to kill Andy off. I actually yelled explitives, and may or may not have woken up my flatmate. I'm SO glad that it all ended happily. Thank-you for this fic!
10/20/2006 c23 Zelda Fitz
Oh, this is the cutest story yet!
Fantastic!
While I was reading it, I really enjoyed watching the characters grow and evolve. Like, how someone can seem so bad ass when you don't know them, but then actually be a sweetheart... psychotic as they may be.
Wonderful!
Oh, this is the cutest story yet!
Fantastic!
While I was reading it, I really enjoyed watching the characters grow and evolve. Like, how someone can seem so bad ass when you don't know them, but then actually be a sweetheart... psychotic as they may be.
Wonderful!
9/8/2006 c23 Dead Fridays
Here I was, bumbling along, thinking of nipping off a bit of a small reading and hours later, I realized I was actually snuggled in this mother epic of slash fiction. Keep up the great writing. So much emotion, passion, realism! Oh, I might just be in love.
Here I was, bumbling along, thinking of nipping off a bit of a small reading and hours later, I realized I was actually snuggled in this mother epic of slash fiction. Keep up the great writing. So much emotion, passion, realism! Oh, I might just be in love.
9/4/2006 c23 2crissy
that was a great fic. a really good read. so entertaining and sweet. and really messed up. i liked it.
2crissythat was a great fic. a really good read. so entertaining and sweet. and really messed up. i liked it.
8/22/2006 c23 Kitsune Luver
Wow. Brilliant story! I just can't get over how amazing this story is. I would encourage everyone to read this story. It's about humanity and is so real. I mean, it's not too realistic, but it still has this really and truly real quality to it. I luved this story so much. It has definitely made my top 5 list. Please keep writing in your future because you could publish this kind of story.
Wow. Brilliant story! I just can't get over how amazing this story is. I would encourage everyone to read this story. It's about humanity and is so real. I mean, it's not too realistic, but it still has this really and truly real quality to it. I luved this story so much. It has definitely made my top 5 list. Please keep writing in your future because you could publish this kind of story.