for Sea Me7/31/2006 c1 SilverTears6955
o...very dark. I liked the ending a lot, it was very unexpected.
Very dark, very goth, very bloody and very emotional. Well done.
o...very dark. I liked the ending a lot, it was very unexpected.
Very dark, very goth, very bloody and very emotional. Well done.
2/28/2006 c1 
23Aerials05
Very well done. I love this story. It reminds me of one I wrote once on my other FictionPress account. Keep up the good work.
~A05
23Aerials05Very well done. I love this story. It reminds me of one I wrote once on my other FictionPress account. Keep up the good work.
~A05
1/3/2006 c1 12Simplycity
Wow, so not an ending I expected. I mean, they were having fun at the Easter egg hunt! *hmm; I wonder what they were talking about ealier... but well written [:
12SimplycityWow, so not an ending I expected. I mean, they were having fun at the Easter egg hunt! *hmm; I wonder what they were talking about ealier... but well written [:
12/30/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Have I mentioned that I really like your one shots? This is so emotional...I know that suicide stories are done a lot, but I resist calling this clihce because I really like your style. I'd like to see more of your prose!
20Pheobe MeryllHave I mentioned that I really like your one shots? This is so emotional...I know that suicide stories are done a lot, but I resist calling this clihce because I really like your style. I'd like to see more of your prose!
12/30/2005 c1 Transparent
Very dramatic. Very shiney.
Very dramatic. Very shiney.
12/29/2005 c1 20Ode to Maddness
This is so sad! Seriously sad...
Wow, i think this is oddly familiar. im not sure why though.
Anyway good story, You are a fantastic writer!
-Stay Insane-Ode To Maddness-
20Ode to MaddnessThis is so sad! Seriously sad...
Wow, i think this is oddly familiar. im not sure why though.
Anyway good story, You are a fantastic writer!
-Stay Insane-Ode To Maddness-
12/29/2005 c1 36Fallen Angel Sapphire
this story is really good...it just makes u want to read it...just takes u into it and doesn't let u go till u read the ending..great story
36Fallen Angel Sapphirethis story is really good...it just makes u want to read it...just takes u into it and doesn't let u go till u read the ending..great story
12/29/2005 c1 27Sama-T
Hey great story, you have a very powerful way with word to real in unsuspecting readers and tie them in... this particular work is very dramatic as i had no idea that jen was going to jump, but then again those are very powerful memories of seeing your family murdered by your father, freat job ^_^.
p.s. The rating on this should be "T" because some of events taking place in this stpry could be tramatising to a 7 years old
~S.T.~
27Sama-THey great story, you have a very powerful way with word to real in unsuspecting readers and tie them in... this particular work is very dramatic as i had no idea that jen was going to jump, but then again those are very powerful memories of seeing your family murdered by your father, freat job ^_^.
p.s. The rating on this should be "T" because some of events taking place in this stpry could be tramatising to a 7 years old
~S.T.~
12/29/2005 c1 11les petits bateaux
Wow...this was really heart-wrenching. Who knew that this would befall Jen like that, something so terrible like the murders of her mother and sister. And I also didn't believed that she commited suicide. I guess it was just the memory of the incident and how much she loved Mara that made her do so. A very sad story, but I loved it.
11les petits bateauxWow...this was really heart-wrenching. Who knew that this would befall Jen like that, something so terrible like the murders of her mother and sister. And I also didn't believed that she commited suicide. I guess it was just the memory of the incident and how much she loved Mara that made her do so. A very sad story, but I loved it.
12/29/2005 c1 34daedal
Wow... that's so sad :( I feel bad for Mara. The ending was beautiful. You have a wonderful use of language throughout the whole thing. I'm guessing this was one-shot or I'd put you on alert.
Ps. It would be great if you could review some of my stories, if you have the time x Thank you ^.^
34daedalWow... that's so sad :( I feel bad for Mara. The ending was beautiful. You have a wonderful use of language throughout the whole thing. I'm guessing this was one-shot or I'd put you on alert.
Ps. It would be great if you could review some of my stories, if you have the time x Thank you ^.^