9/17/2014 c8 Sepelrastas
Hey, just wanted to drop a line or two your way :)

First of all, really liking the story thus far.

Second, I know you just said there you've done your research on drus, but I just had to point out that neither cannabis (marijuana) or ecstacy cause hallucinations. Sure, you might get slight visuals if you smoke a ton, but neither of them is a hallucinogen. I understand the point of view you're giving, but if you want to feature a hallucinogen, it should be more to the line of mushrooms or acid (LSD).

I am not endorsing drug use in any way, just want to set the facts straight :) Anyways, thank you again for the read thus far.

7/19/2012 c25 storyreader
nice story, didn't like jude. i wouldn't take him back

5/10/2012 c1 Darkblue2018
This is a really good chapter. I can't wait to read the rest of it!

9/19/2011 c25 AnnieLS
I really loved your story and, as this is the third time I've read it, I thought I'd get around to reviewing it.

The plot itself, along with many of the characters, is clearly very thought out and developed. It was a great original plot, there was a lot going on throughout the story, with a lot of main characters, but it all managed to tie together nicely with the main romance coming through and managing to become a clear theme throughout. A lot of the big moments in the plot weren't just pulled out of nowhere, they were developed and they were a lot more emotional and heartfelt because of it.

The technical composition of your story was great, no bad spelling, grammar. It was a pleasure to sit down and read, with the odd typo the only clear mistakes. I absolutely loved the end paragraph of the last chapter.I could really picture it well in my mind and connect with the image and emotion, it was a nice touch.

I really enjoyed the character of Jude throughout the story and thought he was well developed, perfectly written at different times throughout the story, acting within his parameters throughout but not a monotone character when interacting with different people. Although I also liked Katelyn, I would have preferred her to be a bit more fallible, or even just give into some of her own rage, for her to have acted, at times, in a more emotional and dramatic way just to round her out through the plot.

There were a few niggly points I'd like to mention that I just pulled up on while reading the story and thought I'd go through them constructively.

I didn't particularly enjoy Kendall's character development throughout and found his personal story in chapter nine random and not emotional at all. His change after that event and the development of his relationship was also rather odd and sadly wasn't given the attention I thought it needed. It would have been nice if there had been more attention paid to Kendall and Claudia tackling the issue of her pregnancy and them having a child.

I also found the coach molestation thing a little far fetched within the context. It's good to give Jude's drug taking a beginning and motive, and attaching it to sport does make sense, but it just seemed like a random, large leap to me. And if it was important enough to keep it as an event for the ending, it needs a lot more development and attention, throughout the body of the story. I think it would have also been better to draw out Jude's eventual slip into taking drugs in the end and driving the car, I would have preferred a more emotional slip with more reasoning behind.

I thought Jude's trip to France at the end was too random. Maybe an explanation of a 'change of scenery' would have made more sense, or just more of a back story to his fashion ambitions.

Managing to write a complex story with a lot of big themes is very difficult and you managed to pull it off beautifully and you wrote a great story. I loved reading it this time, and the last time, and the time before that. Looking forward to reading the sequel now, I think the last time I had followed it, it hadn't been finished.

Thanks for a great story.

6/16/2011 c25 crissy19
whoa this was a pretty good freaking story! on to the squeal!

12/19/2010 c16 AngelsXDevils
I don't know if this was already mentioned but during the section about Kendall and Claudia, you accidentally used the name Kevin instead of Kendall which is kind of disturbing... xD

11/27/2010 c25 1my princess ending
I LUV THIS STORY! I really like how it has continuous problems and all that but what I like the most is that the title of this story is really unique and it fits the story just right. I found it confusing when you wrote Katelyn climbed onto the trampoline. I sorta thought she was going to jump on it and magically jump as high as Jude's airplane. But that's bullshit. Anyway, I LUV THE STORY!