for The Third Man Who Heard Me Cry3/21/2006 c1 CkShorty
I loved this. It was really good, emotion was obvious and stood out, which always attracts me to poetry. Keep up the good work. You're good at writing poems.
CK
I loved this. It was really good, emotion was obvious and stood out, which always attracts me to poetry. Keep up the good work. You're good at writing poems.
CK
2/10/2006 c1 
1Brighde
Wow, really powerful word choice. Vivid imagery -and- strong emotions. Nice work ^_^
-B. Blum
1BrighdeWow, really powerful word choice. Vivid imagery -and- strong emotions. Nice work ^_^
-B. Blum
1/12/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
this was very beautifully written. i enjoyed reading this :)thank you for your review and the thing he is failing to see is the starry night outside his window. sorry i guess i was a bit unclear on that =/
-pink dandy lion
144chaos called creationthis was very beautifully written. i enjoyed reading this :)thank you for your review and the thing he is failing to see is the starry night outside his window. sorry i guess i was a bit unclear on that =/
-pink dandy lion
12/31/2005 c1 10just a teardrop
i love the sentence structures, especially on the first line. lovely. the last line doesn't seem quite right (something about the tenses changing?) but other than that, great work :D
10just a teardropi love the sentence structures, especially on the first line. lovely. the last line doesn't seem quite right (something about the tenses changing?) but other than that, great work :D
12/29/2005 c1 67The Juggler 42
I read the first three lines several times. I think they're the best of the poem. I don't quite understand how "with so many lies" fits in. Also the last two lines don't quite do it for me; they seem like a slight let down from the rest of the poem. I do like the comparison of incense to silk. I shall read your other work. Kudos.
67The Juggler 42I read the first three lines several times. I think they're the best of the poem. I don't quite understand how "with so many lies" fits in. Also the last two lines don't quite do it for me; they seem like a slight let down from the rest of the poem. I do like the comparison of incense to silk. I shall read your other work. Kudos.