for Snowflakes2/10/2006 c1 
879Moondog Dozier
Wonderful scene creation you develop in the beginning. The sentiment and execution of this are so realistic that you can almost feel the snow and see the boy pondering the new realization of what was just told to him. Very well written and developed. Excellent work.
879Moondog DozierWonderful scene creation you develop in the beginning. The sentiment and execution of this are so realistic that you can almost feel the snow and see the boy pondering the new realization of what was just told to him. Very well written and developed. Excellent work.
1/15/2006 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
I liked the line "the father stared at me as if he had just lost his little boy." That captures the essence of this story, innocence and naivety being broken by reality, in a touching way. I think you could have driven that point a bit harder, personally, but as far as giving the reader a mental image, this was very well-done. Thanks for reviewing my story! And keep writing!
20Pheobe MeryllI liked the line "the father stared at me as if he had just lost his little boy." That captures the essence of this story, innocence and naivety being broken by reality, in a touching way. I think you could have driven that point a bit harder, personally, but as far as giving the reader a mental image, this was very well-done. Thanks for reviewing my story! And keep writing!
1/9/2006 c1 monkey
that's so sweet... i definately had tears in my eyes at the end of that.
that's so sweet... i definately had tears in my eyes at the end of that.
12/30/2005 c1 1Safire-Goddess
aw this story is touching. it's really good are you going to continue or its just a one chapter only type of thing.
1Safire-Goddessaw this story is touching. it's really good are you going to continue or its just a one chapter only type of thing.