11/5/2006 c1 aeolyn
Interesting story line, but the grammar on this is pretty bad. Try using periods instead of commas for punctuation, and captalization when needed, not in the middle of a sentence of a non-pronoun. This story has potential though, if you worked a little more on it.
Interesting story line, but the grammar on this is pretty bad. Try using periods instead of commas for punctuation, and captalization when needed, not in the middle of a sentence of a non-pronoun. This story has potential though, if you worked a little more on it.