for Muted Screams and Loud Silences1/1/2006 c1 
77Selene Rousseau
very well said...
very true indeed... nowadayds...
im not sure if you have a bit of error here...in the second line...
"When you're forced to not talk"
should it be not to talk...
i can relate on this... this is my kind of upbringing in my home...my relationship with my dad of course...
like it a lot!
MUCH LOVES,SELENE ROUSSEAU
77Selene Rousseauvery well said...
very true indeed... nowadayds...
im not sure if you have a bit of error here...in the second line...
"When you're forced to not talk"
should it be not to talk...
i can relate on this... this is my kind of upbringing in my home...my relationship with my dad of course...
like it a lot!
MUCH LOVES,SELENE ROUSSEAU
1/1/2006 c1 12eighteen hundred
This is pretty good, in my opinion. Some lines flowed a bit choppy, read it out loud a couple times and see if you don't notice any improvements that could be made in line structure. Other than that, nice stuff.
12eighteen hundredThis is pretty good, in my opinion. Some lines flowed a bit choppy, read it out loud a couple times and see if you don't notice any improvements that could be made in line structure. Other than that, nice stuff.