
9/13/2006 c1
871no.peace.los.angeles
What a cool little poem. I especially like "side street brawl" and the rhyming and flow of this piece. Nice work. Keep writing! :)

What a cool little poem. I especially like "side street brawl" and the rhyming and flow of this piece. Nice work. Keep writing! :)
8/19/2006 c1 hey maria
Really good short poems are hard to write; you can put a few lines together and call it a poem, but that doesn't mean it has any power or meaning in it. But this does. The rhythm was lovely and so was the meaning. This is going on my favorites.
Really good short poems are hard to write; you can put a few lines together and call it a poem, but that doesn't mean it has any power or meaning in it. But this does. The rhythm was lovely and so was the meaning. This is going on my favorites.
4/20/2006 c1
20Autumn Dance
Really powerful. Good rhyme and signature. I think the way it's been laid out- it's almost like you the reader's not really meant to care about anything else but the words and that's a clever and frivolous way of doing it. Your layout is perfect. x

Really powerful. Good rhyme and signature. I think the way it's been laid out- it's almost like you the reader's not really meant to care about anything else but the words and that's a clever and frivolous way of doing it. Your layout is perfect. x
1/23/2006 c1
236mezzie
this is really cool. short but very complete, good flow, comprehensive image.
mezzie

this is really cool. short but very complete, good flow, comprehensive image.
mezzie
1/7/2006 c1 a lonely september
...wow... normally i'm not one for rhyming, but this is amazing, the emotion swept it away. the last line was amazing, wonderful. : )
...wow... normally i'm not one for rhyming, but this is amazing, the emotion swept it away. the last line was amazing, wonderful. : )