for What she should have said but didn't know1/5/2006 c1 
10Winter Eve
Wow, this is interesting. a bit confusing at first, but really interesting. :)
p.s. thanks for the reviews! :D
10Winter EveWow, this is interesting. a bit confusing at first, but really interesting. :)
p.s. thanks for the reviews! :D
1/4/2006 c1 Dina
Oh amazing.I love it.It wasnt that hard to understand.I did read it twice but only because i wanted to read it with the parentheses then without that way i got both sides of the story so to speak.It was a realy cool idea to use the parentheses as the girls thoughts.Ive never seen it anything writen like that before.It was verry uniqe which is one of the reasons why i liked it so much.
Oh amazing.I love it.It wasnt that hard to understand.I did read it twice but only because i wanted to read it with the parentheses then without that way i got both sides of the story so to speak.It was a realy cool idea to use the parentheses as the girls thoughts.Ive never seen it anything writen like that before.It was verry uniqe which is one of the reasons why i liked it so much.
1/4/2006 c1 2Taintless17
My god, that was intense!
Brilliant, although I did have to read the explanation before getting it, I won't lie. still, very, very interesting, and bursting of emotion.
Keep it up, and I will always be impressed.
2Taintless17My god, that was intense!
Brilliant, although I did have to read the explanation before getting it, I won't lie. still, very, very interesting, and bursting of emotion.
Keep it up, and I will always be impressed.
1/4/2006 c1 free-to-dream15
hmm...this was very insightful but I don't like the style too much, sry! lol... I didn't really get it until I read your explination so thanks for that!
hmm...this was very insightful but I don't like the style too much, sry! lol... I didn't really get it until I read your explination so thanks for that!
1/4/2006 c1 Cassandra
Wow. That was fabulous. It doesn't make complete sense yet to me, but I'm on my way I think. I love this style. It's like connotation inserted into the denotation or something. Really, really great. Don't take it down.
Wow. That was fabulous. It doesn't make complete sense yet to me, but I'm on my way I think. I love this style. It's like connotation inserted into the denotation or something. Really, really great. Don't take it down.
1/3/2006 c1 7Victoria Humblydum
thats an interesting poem i didnt really get it but i liked it alot any way. good job :)
7Victoria Humblydumthats an interesting poem i didnt really get it but i liked it alot any way. good job :)
1/3/2006 c1 5water lorelei
This took awhile to read, for I don't understand it; The matter of Aitheism or Christianity or the Jewish faith. It all fiddles with my mind, the she's and he's saying this and that, it is all... well... not explainatory (excuse my spelling if that was wrong; I couldn't find a synonym).
I liked the last line a lot! It gave a whooshing end to it.
I also liked the "Sign on the dotted line? Certainly, she says." It was a great way to put how she was saving her own casket. It in a sense works itself out, the point I mean, but why she did it, makes no contribution to my slow working mind. Ok, well, it's not so slow, but... you said you'll probably take it off tomorrow, but, I'm wondoring if this is not a one-shot, perhaps you could continue this in a more understandable fashion. I know you must be yelling at the screen saying, "O my gosh! It's as plain as day!", but, I have figured out, through reveiws and reading, that most readers are in a sense bat-blind when they read, only noticing something that stcks out like a light in the dark.
This may seem out of place after all that, but, through the confuddling, the detail is truly beautiful. (notice that when I mean detail, I don't neccesarilly mean 'detail-detail', if that makes sense whatsoever.)
With all the hope one who is bat-blind can give, I wish you a Happy Sailing.
*silent darkness*
5water loreleiThis took awhile to read, for I don't understand it; The matter of Aitheism or Christianity or the Jewish faith. It all fiddles with my mind, the she's and he's saying this and that, it is all... well... not explainatory (excuse my spelling if that was wrong; I couldn't find a synonym).
I liked the last line a lot! It gave a whooshing end to it.
I also liked the "Sign on the dotted line? Certainly, she says." It was a great way to put how she was saving her own casket. It in a sense works itself out, the point I mean, but why she did it, makes no contribution to my slow working mind. Ok, well, it's not so slow, but... you said you'll probably take it off tomorrow, but, I'm wondoring if this is not a one-shot, perhaps you could continue this in a more understandable fashion. I know you must be yelling at the screen saying, "O my gosh! It's as plain as day!", but, I have figured out, through reveiws and reading, that most readers are in a sense bat-blind when they read, only noticing something that stcks out like a light in the dark.
This may seem out of place after all that, but, through the confuddling, the detail is truly beautiful. (notice that when I mean detail, I don't neccesarilly mean 'detail-detail', if that makes sense whatsoever.)
With all the hope one who is bat-blind can give, I wish you a Happy Sailing.
*silent darkness*