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1/4/2006 c2 5Corpsman-of-Krieg
Wow. I am truly impressed. You got me hooked in under 700 words. Kudos. Well, not that I didn't believe you before, but now that I've read this, I have become enthralled in the dark storyline. Keep up the great work. I'll keep in touch. Ch.8 in Bratislava should be up by Feb.

CK
1/4/2006 c2 Arkash
OK, I was expecting the little boy, grown into a man, somehow be this new employee. I suppose I was wrong.

Keep updating, I want to know. *_*
1/4/2006 c1 Arkash
Hurray, a new "Machine" story!

CC: correction is square brackets. "Behind him, he could hear the unmistakable droning of a hover-platform with human voices on it, and then several gunshots [rang] out..."

"The boy [fell] down."

Is the boy the Machine?

Good beginning. *_*
1/4/2006 c1 dreamshell
gripping beginning. since you put Dune in my mind, i couldn't help but note the similarity between this and the beginning of God-Emperor (both open with a chase). not bashing you, i love the comparision.

but, yeah, disturbing thought - people hunting people (Caradog seemed human, probably English, to me. right?).

looking forward to more as it comes. ;)
1/3/2006 c1 Kreen
Holy shit, man. This is one dark story. I love it! Just the intro grabbed me.
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