for Muse1/9/2006 c1 
145BellonaFlayreRiver
"my muse, my lover, my soul, my friend." this is my favorite line, and the repititions just make it stand out more. i love the flow of this work. i can relate so much, which im beginning to learn is a key to good writing. a very lovely read. lovely.
145BellonaFlayreRiver"my muse, my lover, my soul, my friend." this is my favorite line, and the repititions just make it stand out more. i love the flow of this work. i can relate so much, which im beginning to learn is a key to good writing. a very lovely read. lovely.
1/9/2006 c1 GetBehindMeSatan
Wow. Just, wow. :: blinks::
I love this to death. I can connect with it: I've been playing the violin for about 2 years now. I'm not as good as you (thinks of Mozart cadenzas) but I'm trying!
I love the way you've broken the poem up with the words "My muse, my lover, my soul, my friend." Very beautiful.
The "Swiftly o’er the silver strings" really struck a chord in me! (no pun intended :D)
As I can't reply to you in email, I'd like to answer your questions about my work now. Firstly, about Fragile Hands: The capitolising really wasn't ment, but I go a bit mad sometimes with the caps lock.
About Death's Lament: I'll add the dashes, thank-you for pointing that out! The Kohl thing: have you ever seen Pirates of the Caribbean? Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow, he's got eye-liner around his eyes, it looks kind of smudged? That's what I was aiming for.
Finally, about Spider's Web: I may just leave that sentance out. This piece of writing was a gift for a friend cause she wanted something I had writen. I apoligise for the 'its/it's' thing. And for the 'to/too' thing, as well. I'm in first year High School, have taken no creative classes, have not had my Standard Grades or Highers and my teacher is still... teaching us about prefixes. But that would be an excuse, so I apoligise. I'll try to fix it as soon as possible :)
Thanks again for the review, and this has got to be one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read on fiction press. Well done, it's going on my fave's :)
Channa
Wow. Just, wow. :: blinks::
I love this to death. I can connect with it: I've been playing the violin for about 2 years now. I'm not as good as you (thinks of Mozart cadenzas) but I'm trying!
I love the way you've broken the poem up with the words "My muse, my lover, my soul, my friend." Very beautiful.
The "Swiftly o’er the silver strings" really struck a chord in me! (no pun intended :D)
As I can't reply to you in email, I'd like to answer your questions about my work now. Firstly, about Fragile Hands: The capitolising really wasn't ment, but I go a bit mad sometimes with the caps lock.
About Death's Lament: I'll add the dashes, thank-you for pointing that out! The Kohl thing: have you ever seen Pirates of the Caribbean? Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow, he's got eye-liner around his eyes, it looks kind of smudged? That's what I was aiming for.
Finally, about Spider's Web: I may just leave that sentance out. This piece of writing was a gift for a friend cause she wanted something I had writen. I apoligise for the 'its/it's' thing. And for the 'to/too' thing, as well. I'm in first year High School, have taken no creative classes, have not had my Standard Grades or Highers and my teacher is still... teaching us about prefixes. But that would be an excuse, so I apoligise. I'll try to fix it as soon as possible :)
Thanks again for the review, and this has got to be one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read on fiction press. Well done, it's going on my fave's :)
Channa
1/5/2006 c1 79Ashes.to.Acid
Beautiful and creative. I love how you described your violin..I feel the same way about my guitar. Thank you for your review on "Skin and Bone". I apologize for not coming across quite as I wanted to..I wanted my poem to express both faults, not just the male's.
79Ashes.to.AcidBeautiful and creative. I love how you described your violin..I feel the same way about my guitar. Thank you for your review on "Skin and Bone". I apologize for not coming across quite as I wanted to..I wanted my poem to express both faults, not just the male's.
1/5/2006 c1 1rrmehta364
i played the viola once, and i never felt this way about it. still, after reading this poem i really feel i could feel this way about my instrument (saxaphone) anyways, good luck in your music. if your music is nearly as beautiful as your poetry, you must truly be talented.
ciao
1rrmehta364i played the viola once, and i never felt this way about it. still, after reading this poem i really feel i could feel this way about my instrument (saxaphone) anyways, good luck in your music. if your music is nearly as beautiful as your poetry, you must truly be talented.
ciao
1/4/2006 c1 31Teacup Majoram
When I saw that the poem was about a violin I was not expecting this. Great poem, very well written.
31Teacup MajoramWhen I saw that the poem was about a violin I was not expecting this. Great poem, very well written.
1/4/2006 c1 237classic violet
It was pretty and beautiful. A real charmer.
Thank you for your reviews!
237classic violetIt was pretty and beautiful. A real charmer.
Thank you for your reviews!
1/4/2006 c1 20sloppy firsts
my muse, my lover, my soul, my friend. that's the exact way i feel with my piano just never knew how to say it...thank you so much for this.
20sloppy firstsmy muse, my lover, my soul, my friend. that's the exact way i feel with my piano just never knew how to say it...thank you so much for this.