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6/3/2014 c1 Guest
Good and sad.
6/22/2006 c1 123Black and White Dreams
That is so sad... *starts crying...* But it's a beautiful story.

*::~Cat~::*
3/7/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
Wow...just wow. *sheds a tiny tear* That was very beautiful indeed, and the impact was stronger as you wrote the story in the eyes of a young child, whose mind is still too soft to mould. Well done, well done.
1/11/2006 c1 Herminia
Overall, the story was very good. However, I feel that you need to elaborate on the story. Use imagery to describe the setting the people. Use dialogue to depict people's accents and their conversations. Don't just tell the reader - show the reader exactly what is happening. Again, you did well.
1/9/2006 c1 Mya
AW! How cute! I love it!
1/5/2006 c1 7Teufel66
Oh I like it! For some reason I love kids' stories so much. It brings a smile on my face. Great work!
1/4/2006 c1 8BJ Worth
Good start, but I would enjoy it more if it were longer I think, maybe flesh the ideas out a bit
1/4/2006 c1 ali.k
aw sweet

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