4/21/2006 c1 BicGirl
What a wonderful poem. I really like the way you wrote it, with a few words on each line. I especially like the first section "I hate my tears/My weakness/So soon they fall/When I’m feeling sad/Or angry/Or anything at all"
What a wonderful poem. I really like the way you wrote it, with a few words on each line. I especially like the first section "I hate my tears/My weakness/So soon they fall/When I’m feeling sad/Or angry/Or anything at all"
4/7/2006 c1 17CrimsonSoulTears
that was so grate, its just wat im feelin all the time. i luv dis, i'm favin it, ur writin is so gr8!x
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that was so grate, its just wat im feelin all the time. i luv dis, i'm favin it, ur writin is so gr8!x
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1/8/2006 c1 Safira
As twisted.little.mind already mentioned, a strength of this poem is that is holds truth. The emotion is raw and unmasked. After all, isn’t it human nature to shield our weaknesses from others – fearing vulnerability and the unknown?
There seems to be some hegemonic perception in our world that we must always be strong. In turn, weaknesses of a physical or emotional nature are perceived as flaws and to be avoided – something like the act of crying. However, as twisted.little.mind further commented, crying can be a sign of courage, although I do realise crying does not appear to be an option in your poem. What I mean to say is that crying with someone who cares or in the privacy of one’s own bedroom is not so bad. Do not hate it and do not hold back until the pain builds up and threatens to implode. To me the act of crying can purify the soul and relieves anguishes to an extent.
As a side note of advice, don't put any statements degrading yourself or your work in the summary. This often puts potential readers off as I have been told. Remember to write as you please and in a way that is true to yourself. Take this site as an opportunity to learn from your work and the work of others. Life is a long journey of learning isn't it?
Keep writing and keep up the good work!
Autumn.
As twisted.little.mind already mentioned, a strength of this poem is that is holds truth. The emotion is raw and unmasked. After all, isn’t it human nature to shield our weaknesses from others – fearing vulnerability and the unknown?
There seems to be some hegemonic perception in our world that we must always be strong. In turn, weaknesses of a physical or emotional nature are perceived as flaws and to be avoided – something like the act of crying. However, as twisted.little.mind further commented, crying can be a sign of courage, although I do realise crying does not appear to be an option in your poem. What I mean to say is that crying with someone who cares or in the privacy of one’s own bedroom is not so bad. Do not hate it and do not hold back until the pain builds up and threatens to implode. To me the act of crying can purify the soul and relieves anguishes to an extent.
As a side note of advice, don't put any statements degrading yourself or your work in the summary. This often puts potential readers off as I have been told. Remember to write as you please and in a way that is true to yourself. Take this site as an opportunity to learn from your work and the work of others. Life is a long journey of learning isn't it?
Keep writing and keep up the good work!
Autumn.
1/8/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
I love the fact that you wrote this poem because it's really true. The, so far, most interesting misconception of tears is that it's a sign of weakness. Actually, it's a sign of true courage to just let all your tears out because you have the courage to do so. Anyways, I love the flow of emotions here. Everything was deep.
I love the fact that you wrote this poem because it's really true. The, so far, most interesting misconception of tears is that it's a sign of weakness. Actually, it's a sign of true courage to just let all your tears out because you have the courage to do so. Anyways, I love the flow of emotions here. Everything was deep.
1/8/2006 c1 19Pink Sparrow
wow, this is written really well. I like it. I like the rhyming in there as well. Nice work!
wow, this is written really well. I like it. I like the rhyming in there as well. Nice work!