for implode11/17/2007 c1 
3Lost.in.Ambiguity
haha. despite my limited vocabulary, suprisingly, i actually did know what implode meant. anyhoo, back to the poem.
-interesting, stylish format and way of writing you have there. the flow was eloquent (redundant phrase, i know), except at some parts, where the parentheses kind of ruins it if you're reading out loud (in your mind). (although the purpose of parentheses of a poem is more like a side-note within the poem... but then again, a lot of people do use parentheses for emphasis anyhow). ah nvm, i lied. only one part, "everyday(night) i pay tribute" but how would you show it was day and night, so don't mind my pettiness... ok then. Really, beautiful and well-written piece. Descriptive words that really bring out the emotions. Powerful and moving from the beginning to the end. And great, great title- it really tied in with the content. Awesome job.
3Lost.in.Ambiguityhaha. despite my limited vocabulary, suprisingly, i actually did know what implode meant. anyhoo, back to the poem.
-interesting, stylish format and way of writing you have there. the flow was eloquent (redundant phrase, i know), except at some parts, where the parentheses kind of ruins it if you're reading out loud (in your mind). (although the purpose of parentheses of a poem is more like a side-note within the poem... but then again, a lot of people do use parentheses for emphasis anyhow). ah nvm, i lied. only one part, "everyday(night) i pay tribute" but how would you show it was day and night, so don't mind my pettiness... ok then. Really, beautiful and well-written piece. Descriptive words that really bring out the emotions. Powerful and moving from the beginning to the end. And great, great title- it really tied in with the content. Awesome job.
12/4/2006 c1 495mate.feed.kill.repeat
Morbid. But beautiful. Funny how that works...
Anyways, I liked it and the form is awesome.
-STIX-
495mate.feed.kill.repeatMorbid. But beautiful. Funny how that works...
Anyways, I liked it and the form is awesome.
-STIX-
9/13/2006 c1 61the.pink.life
M, this is nice. I love the way you play with formatting. Definitely makes a piece more exciting to read. Every time I open up a poem and it looks like this one, I get excited to read it, just because it LOOKS like it will be a good poem. And I'm usually not disappointed. I really like the 3rd stanza of this one, especially stars falling for you. M, stars. Beautiful. Keep writing! :)
61the.pink.lifeM, this is nice. I love the way you play with formatting. Definitely makes a piece more exciting to read. Every time I open up a poem and it looks like this one, I get excited to read it, just because it LOOKS like it will be a good poem. And I'm usually not disappointed. I really like the 3rd stanza of this one, especially stars falling for you. M, stars. Beautiful. Keep writing! :)
8/26/2006 c1 64realityescapesher
"i think tonight/the stars could (should) fall for us;" there's something so enchanting about these two lines. beautiful.-aly
64realityescapesher"i think tonight/the stars could (should) fall for us;" there's something so enchanting about these two lines. beautiful.-aly
3/30/2006 c1 40Doray
I view the format the same way as in Rewriting My Epitaph, although I guess that having no spaces between words mean a firm perspective/decision. This poem is great, I love the s-s-stutter and the connection of ribbon (on the bloody wrist) to white Christmas. I like the words you put in the center, they are very reflective.
40DorayI view the format the same way as in Rewriting My Epitaph, although I guess that having no spaces between words mean a firm perspective/decision. This poem is great, I love the s-s-stutter and the connection of ribbon (on the bloody wrist) to white Christmas. I like the words you put in the center, they are very reflective.
3/25/2006 c1 34The Melancholy Astronaut
It's like film someone cut up and pasted back together. So-ravbesderlent.
Because I couldn't find a real word to express what I meant.
34The Melancholy AstronautIt's like film someone cut up and pasted back together. So-ravbesderlent.
Because I couldn't find a real word to express what I meant.
3/23/2006 c1 25lozfairy
Oh God! This is so beautiful, so elequently written and so sad. I love this style of poetry. The ending especially I like, its the sort of poem that lingers in the mind long after it's been read. Beautiful.
25lozfairyOh God! This is so beautiful, so elequently written and so sad. I love this style of poetry. The ending especially I like, its the sort of poem that lingers in the mind long after it's been read. Beautiful.
2/21/2006 c1 42crinkled aster ribbon
i absolutely adore the last stanza.
i can somehow relate to it, even though i can't. you're that good.
42crinkled aster ribboni absolutely adore the last stanza.
i can somehow relate to it, even though i can't. you're that good.
2/7/2006 c1 28emilyrachel18
wow! This is the most amazing poem i have read to date, it is so full of emotion, it's one i feel i could read over and over again. The ending is so moving and it speaks to my soul and whispers a thousand secrets from my past... amazing.
28emilyrachel18wow! This is the most amazing poem i have read to date, it is so full of emotion, it's one i feel i could read over and over again. The ending is so moving and it speaks to my soul and whispers a thousand secrets from my past... amazing.
1/30/2006 c1 8TheDarknessCombined
whoa. that's really cool. i think it was about cuttin your wrists? well ethier way it was well composed. i also love you r penname. WRITE ON!
8TheDarknessCombinedwhoa. that's really cool. i think it was about cuttin your wrists? well ethier way it was well composed. i also love you r penname. WRITE ON!