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1/11/2006 c1 22dragonsdream13
I liked it; it was vivid and never broke its tempo. I also like how you ended it with the one word, Corpus, because it was just a really good closer and defined the whole mood of the poem. One thing I'm curious about though, is that in your description you said you made this for a cd you were making. Does that mean that this is a song? It doesnt really matter I guess. Good Job. -DragonsDream
1/11/2006 c1 10just a teardrop
this is great! i've read a lot of angst songs, but most of them don't succeed in getting over the swear words - whereas this actually has a story, and is worded really well. i especially like 'a child of the eternally wronged/ and your wretched blood will stain my hands' and the ending. nice work!

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