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8/1/2007 c1 Mckenzie Drestire
Good use of the iambic pentamiter (think that's what it's called anyway, the 10 beats in one line) anyway, really good intelligent use of the form and i can understand how it took you so long, form can be a bitch but you managed to pull it off very well. Reminds me a bit of 'The Crow' don't know why, maybe it's your account name but very much had the style of the film in terms of rythem.

Peace out, keep writing, Kenzie
9/3/2006 c1 270dustytiger
wow, this is good, i've been reading a lot of sonnets on here of late, just cause it's something i've not been brave enough to try, maybe to inspire me.. this is REALLY good, seriously, though provoking, and very well done... he last line haunting, great work thank you for sharing, and thanx forthe review!
3/6/2006 c1 nofaceme
Hm...not at all my usual fare. But good use of sonnet form. Kudos for that and the ending. Excelent end on this. thanks for the review. Keep it up.
1/23/2006 c1 26Damned Dead Eyes
Absolutely gorgeous.
1/21/2006 c1 169Transparent Cherub
wow, i wish i could write a sonnet.this is really good.thanks for the review.~jestacy.
1/18/2006 c1 31none of burt's beeswax
The last line is great. Very nice imagery.
1/18/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
This is very well done, and darkly descriptive. Phrases such as,"Like agony bleeding", really make this an intriguing read. I like the way the last line is set off to the side, kind of askewing the whole structured format. Sonnets are difficult to write and very limiting, but you've done an excellent job here. Good work.
1/14/2006 c1 18ShadesofBlue69
love the last line. yah, the title does not do the poem justice. great job.
1/11/2006 c1 singingafterdark
Nice shakeperan sonnet, couplet and all. "Crimson cloth to blacken they fearful faces"- Thy? not they i believe. "God’s children crying, death, so far from home"-Beautiful. Last lines are exquisite.

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