for Where Love And Hate Collide4/7/2006 c3 
12Frigid-bitch
Ch. 3West has everything? lol. the only thing I see that he has is... A BIG PROBLEM! ...oh yeah... let me guess... he has the perfect life, perfect grades, perfect lover? lol. that it? keep it up.Ashli
12Frigid-bitchCh. 3West has everything? lol. the only thing I see that he has is... A BIG PROBLEM! ...oh yeah... let me guess... he has the perfect life, perfect grades, perfect lover? lol. that it? keep it up.Ashli
4/7/2006 c2 Frigid-bitch
Ch. 2What the crap! lol. This is crazy. HE TREW A PLATE AT HER... Is he drunk? or what? This is messing up!AShli
Ch. 2What the crap! lol. This is crazy. HE TREW A PLATE AT HER... Is he drunk? or what? This is messing up!AShli
4/4/2006 c12 UJWF0WFW0FWE0WEF0
I so like this story. It did make me wonder about the odds of those two meeting and after talking for 2 minutes living together but it's interesting so I wont get preoccupied with reality.
I so like this story. It did make me wonder about the odds of those two meeting and after talking for 2 minutes living together but it's interesting so I wont get preoccupied with reality.
4/4/2006 c8 UJWF0WFW0FWE0WEF0
That was bad West so should have turned Pat in. Oh, I bet Pat is gay. I wonder what Emilyn has to do with the plot 'cause i don't think the main character is going to fall for her :)
That was bad West so should have turned Pat in. Oh, I bet Pat is gay. I wonder what Emilyn has to do with the plot 'cause i don't think the main character is going to fall for her :)
4/4/2006 c7 UJWF0WFW0FWE0WEF0
Another cliff hanger, the Emilyn side is getting more interesting but compared to the other side it really needs some proof reading. And try seperating dialogue into seperate lines
Another cliff hanger, the Emilyn side is getting more interesting but compared to the other side it really needs some proof reading. And try seperating dialogue into seperate lines
4/4/2006 c6 UJWF0WFW0FWE0WEF0
Cliffy indeed. I can't believe Pat found out so soon. I hope he doesn't murder West. :)
Cliffy indeed. I can't believe Pat found out so soon. I hope he doesn't murder West. :)
3/1/2006 c10 A Caged Mind
Although the story is good, i'm failing to see how the story of an abused girl and a gay guy can mesh together.
Which is what i presume you're intending to do, right?
anyway, good work and keep it up!
Although the story is good, i'm failing to see how the story of an abused girl and a gay guy can mesh together.
Which is what i presume you're intending to do, right?
anyway, good work and keep it up!
2/16/2006 c1 2Solitaire's Mornie
hey there. i've kinda sorta read this already only as a fanfic... i'll read it later to make sure i didn't miss anything... i'm not in a reading mood.
2Solitaire's Morniehey there. i've kinda sorta read this already only as a fanfic... i'll read it later to make sure i didn't miss anything... i'm not in a reading mood.
2/14/2006 c1 33glamorous-giggly-guy
OMG! This is so...so so good...i think i've already reviewed it but still...update oh please oh please!
33glamorous-giggly-guyOMG! This is so...so so good...i think i've already reviewed it but still...update oh please oh please!
2/12/2006 c10 glamorous-giggly-guy
WOW! i nearly cried! this story is amazing! you guys have a really realistic style, if you know what i mean, your characters are so vivid! just some friendly advice though, lines between when people are talking...ARG! stuff it an examplerather than "hi" said jack "how are you?" asked john,consider:"Hi" said jack,"How are you?" asked john.
LOL would just be easier to read! you guys r awsome!
ROCK ON! keep writing! update soon or i'll kill you both!LuvZacXOXOXOXOXOX
WOW! i nearly cried! this story is amazing! you guys have a really realistic style, if you know what i mean, your characters are so vivid! just some friendly advice though, lines between when people are talking...ARG! stuff it an examplerather than "hi" said jack "how are you?" asked john,consider:"Hi" said jack,"How are you?" asked john.
LOL would just be easier to read! you guys r awsome!
ROCK ON! keep writing! update soon or i'll kill you both!LuvZacXOXOXOXOXOX
1/30/2006 c6 A Caged Mind
Fantastic!
Although, your 'he said' or 'he screamed' dialogue things can be pretty awkward sometimes...that and something about '“Look at his stomach!” West practically screamed. “It’s written out right there for you in his SKIN in his BLOOD!”' seems off somehow too...
Fantastic!
Although, your 'he said' or 'he screamed' dialogue things can be pretty awkward sometimes...that and something about '“Look at his stomach!” West practically screamed. “It’s written out right there for you in his SKIN in his BLOOD!”' seems off somehow too...
1/19/2006 c1 11Olive Hudson
Oh my gosh! Hey! You're still around! It's great to know that you're back in business!
Man, it's been a while since the both of us have written here...but I'm getting back to it!
Keep up the good work!
As always,
Olive
11Olive HudsonOh my gosh! Hey! You're still around! It's great to know that you're back in business!
Man, it's been a while since the both of us have written here...but I'm getting back to it!
Keep up the good work!
As always,
Olive