for airplanes in the sky3/1/2006 c1 the naked civil servant
"your cheeks bleeding red moons"... "like night time suicide"...
gorgeous. need i say more? the rhythm & wording is all so PERFECT, tis most impossible not to fall momentarily in love...
"your cheeks bleeding red moons"... "like night time suicide"...
gorgeous. need i say more? the rhythm & wording is all so PERFECT, tis most impossible not to fall momentarily in love...
1/21/2006 c1 
69this is britt
I really liked this. Thanks for your review, btw. Interesting concept and nicely portrayed.
69this is brittI really liked this. Thanks for your review, btw. Interesting concept and nicely portrayed.
1/13/2006 c1 33forsakensmile
Very beautifully written.
"To trace the white scars with your fingers"So very pretty.
33forsakensmileVery beautifully written.
"To trace the white scars with your fingers"So very pretty.
1/13/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Light, even airy, then you get to the second to last stanza, and the contrast, good work with the differentiation of form and substance. I like the lines, "A squad of night lights-as they graze the sky", simple, and yet it really opens up the flow well. Good write.
879Moondog DozierLight, even airy, then you get to the second to last stanza, and the contrast, good work with the differentiation of form and substance. I like the lines, "A squad of night lights-as they graze the sky", simple, and yet it really opens up the flow well. Good write.
1/12/2006 c1 16insomnia in dreamland
this was so beautiful. "To trace the white scars with your fingersyour cheeks bleeding red moons" i loved that part. i loved the metaphors but they had so much meaning behind them. everything was so descriptive & this poem just seems written to perfection. ( this deserves a spot on my fav's shelf )
16insomnia in dreamlandthis was so beautiful. "To trace the white scars with your fingersyour cheeks bleeding red moons" i loved that part. i loved the metaphors but they had so much meaning behind them. everything was so descriptive & this poem just seems written to perfection. ( this deserves a spot on my fav's shelf )