for I Don't Care What You Think9/3/2006 c1 
7L. Rose
I really liked this, especially the end line. Your work is funny and sarcastic at the same time, and people are choosing to take you very seriously, which I find amusing. And don't let flamers get you down, write what you want, when you want, and if they don't like it, they can go screw themselves.~Lillian~
7L. RoseI really liked this, especially the end line. Your work is funny and sarcastic at the same time, and people are choosing to take you very seriously, which I find amusing. And don't let flamers get you down, write what you want, when you want, and if they don't like it, they can go screw themselves.~Lillian~
3/9/2006 c1 nofaceme
tcha know what lovely? Maybe, maybe you should update your profile? And give a little love? I think this was pushed in a way..and I do resent that you are angry. Why so? hugs and flowers for everyone. I hate seeing so many flames. I hate flames. So be happy? B/c in a way, this is self centered, just like us sad cutters. So sh...take a breath. Read some poetry. And share the love. p.s. the thing that makes satire funny is that people agree something is wrong and probably true..and we laugh. This is not funny. I'm sorry you feel like this.
tcha know what lovely? Maybe, maybe you should update your profile? And give a little love? I think this was pushed in a way..and I do resent that you are angry. Why so? hugs and flowers for everyone. I hate seeing so many flames. I hate flames. So be happy? B/c in a way, this is self centered, just like us sad cutters. So sh...take a breath. Read some poetry. And share the love. p.s. the thing that makes satire funny is that people agree something is wrong and probably true..and we laugh. This is not funny. I'm sorry you feel like this.
3/3/2006 c1 36Ella-Watson
okay, i have no problem about you hating my writing, but oh well, i guess this peice of writing you made is very good.
36Ella-Watsonokay, i have no problem about you hating my writing, but oh well, i guess this peice of writing you made is very good.
2/11/2006 c1 14tehrave-deactivated
In response to your rude review of my poem: I would love to hear what constructive criticism you have. (Keep in mind, though, that the key word in that is "constructive", not "criticism".) I don't appreciate your sarcasm; if you have something to say, just say it.
Also: how does my definition of "pretentious" differ from yours?
14tehrave-deactivatedIn response to your rude review of my poem: I would love to hear what constructive criticism you have. (Keep in mind, though, that the key word in that is "constructive", not "criticism".) I don't appreciate your sarcasm; if you have something to say, just say it.
Also: how does my definition of "pretentious" differ from yours?
2/8/2006 c1 13Nicole Michele
The reason people won't leave you alond. is because all you ever do is blow blahblahblah up our asses. Give us some critisism we can work with. And by the way, there are no rules of poetry..it's what you feel, and how YOU want to say it, so you can't bitch someone up a tree for not following the rules..there are none. AND by the fucking way, I actually don't give a shit if I spelled anything worng in here or used improper grammer because..hey I have a life and don't really need to worry about my grammer skills, I have things like friends that matter a tad bit more than when to use your and wehn to use you're. I think you would get a better response if you ate a piece of humble pie and dolled out your reveiwsremembering that your poetry is not the best on here..and most the people you leave bullshit reveiws for are better than you anyway.
13Nicole MicheleThe reason people won't leave you alond. is because all you ever do is blow blahblahblah up our asses. Give us some critisism we can work with. And by the way, there are no rules of poetry..it's what you feel, and how YOU want to say it, so you can't bitch someone up a tree for not following the rules..there are none. AND by the fucking way, I actually don't give a shit if I spelled anything worng in here or used improper grammer because..hey I have a life and don't really need to worry about my grammer skills, I have things like friends that matter a tad bit more than when to use your and wehn to use you're. I think you would get a better response if you ate a piece of humble pie and dolled out your reveiwsremembering that your poetry is not the best on here..and most the people you leave bullshit reveiws for are better than you anyway.
2/3/2006 c1 19wonderland is different now
*is speechless* I'M ON YOUR FAVORITES LIST? when did THIS happen? i thought you hated me, or SOMEthing. *bangs head against desk* okay, if you're doing this just to confuse me, its working.
okay, your poem-
don’t ever swallow a Styrofoam.
that is kind of just placed in there at random. maybe you should consider changing it? i don't know. and you do have good rhyming, just don't add anything unnecessary.
cheers,
~melissa~
19wonderland is different now*is speechless* I'M ON YOUR FAVORITES LIST? when did THIS happen? i thought you hated me, or SOMEthing. *bangs head against desk* okay, if you're doing this just to confuse me, its working.
okay, your poem-
don’t ever swallow a Styrofoam.
that is kind of just placed in there at random. maybe you should consider changing it? i don't know. and you do have good rhyming, just don't add anything unnecessary.
cheers,
~melissa~
1/26/2006 c1 1Unikat
First off you do have potential. You follow a set rhyming scheme, but I must say that your rhymes sometimes seem a little bit forced to the point that it is noticeable. At times it can disrupt the flow of the poem especially, the last line. It doesn't make sense with the context of the poem. You don't have to rhyme for it to be a poem. If you can't find a word that rhymes try using a different word instead so you can continue the pattern, or completely rewrite that line so that it will make sense and rhyme.
I have also read some of your other works about how some people can't write poetry. Don't be a hypocrite. What you say about badly written poems is true, but you don't have the right to criticize others so harshly when you don't even practice what you "preach."
I don't know if you will feel inclined to attack my poems, but if you do I just want to thank you because it means that you actually read them.
Just remember, if you follow the rules that you set for others you poetry will improve immensely.-mitherge
1UnikatFirst off you do have potential. You follow a set rhyming scheme, but I must say that your rhymes sometimes seem a little bit forced to the point that it is noticeable. At times it can disrupt the flow of the poem especially, the last line. It doesn't make sense with the context of the poem. You don't have to rhyme for it to be a poem. If you can't find a word that rhymes try using a different word instead so you can continue the pattern, or completely rewrite that line so that it will make sense and rhyme.
I have also read some of your other works about how some people can't write poetry. Don't be a hypocrite. What you say about badly written poems is true, but you don't have the right to criticize others so harshly when you don't even practice what you "preach."
I don't know if you will feel inclined to attack my poems, but if you do I just want to thank you because it means that you actually read them.
Just remember, if you follow the rules that you set for others you poetry will improve immensely.-mitherge
1/25/2006 c1 56Do-You-Love-Me
People criticize you because you criticize them- or at least me. I was having a bad day already, you know. *sigh* Criticism is the only way we get better, though. Oh, I mean "Constructive" Criticism. The only thing you gave me was useless flames: I find your screen name for this site quite appropriate, since all you did was feed me more "blah, blah, blah."
56Do-You-Love-MePeople criticize you because you criticize them- or at least me. I was having a bad day already, you know. *sigh* Criticism is the only way we get better, though. Oh, I mean "Constructive" Criticism. The only thing you gave me was useless flames: I find your screen name for this site quite appropriate, since all you did was feed me more "blah, blah, blah."
1/23/2006 c1 290Moonlight Tigress
heh... true, true... i like this a lot...
and just for the record, i despise flamers so i must say im behind you if you need a fellow flamer-hater...
or something... anyone flames you just tell me... ill go after them like wildfire, okay?
well, continue writing... very nice indeed... especially the last line... kinda made me laugh a little...:)
290Moonlight Tigressheh... true, true... i like this a lot...
and just for the record, i despise flamers so i must say im behind you if you need a fellow flamer-hater...
or something... anyone flames you just tell me... ill go after them like wildfire, okay?
well, continue writing... very nice indeed... especially the last line... kinda made me laugh a little...:)
1/15/2006 c1 90poetic abortion
the rhyme is a tad forced when i read this, it doesn't ruin anything but it just disrupts the flow in certain places. the poem is good, mokery of the whole thing just plays gloriously in words. each line is quite good, you mention every cliche that i've read and made it a pathetic humor of emo desperation. lovely, lovely.
~* noelle
90poetic abortionthe rhyme is a tad forced when i read this, it doesn't ruin anything but it just disrupts the flow in certain places. the poem is good, mokery of the whole thing just plays gloriously in words. each line is quite good, you mention every cliche that i've read and made it a pathetic humor of emo desperation. lovely, lovely.
~* noelle
1/15/2006 c1 36contrast and friction
If this is supposed to be sarcastic and humorous, it wasn't done THAT well. & I'm sorry, but I'd have to agree with "them", the rhyme is rather forced.
I know that you criticise other people's poetry, & I just believe that you should focus on improving your OWN writing before being so quick to judge so harshly.
& now you're probably going to come to my space and criticise my work. Go ahead, have fun ..
36contrast and frictionIf this is supposed to be sarcastic and humorous, it wasn't done THAT well. & I'm sorry, but I'd have to agree with "them", the rhyme is rather forced.
I know that you criticise other people's poetry, & I just believe that you should focus on improving your OWN writing before being so quick to judge so harshly.
& now you're probably going to come to my space and criticise my work. Go ahead, have fun ..
1/14/2006 c1 Whynter
I have to admit, this particular poem rhymes quite well! I can sense your sarcasm and I can understand how it feels when people critisize your writing like that... but...
"“Your rhymes are forced,” they say,
“and your poems are way, way nay.”
But I know these people are wrong;
I have style and talent all along."
Well.. um.. I guess people say that for a reason and not just to beat you down... I agree that you do have style and talent all along, but I have to agree that sometimes, SOMETIMES the rhyming IS forced. I tried to give you some specific parts on how they seem 'forced'...
As in, the words don't really make sense. Like:
"And remember as you’re writing your poem:
don’t ever swallow a Styrofoam."
'Styrofoam' comes out of nowhere. I know it's supposed to rhyme again, and maybe I'm supposed to 'guess' and catch on the 'suspense'... but if it is meant to be vaguely funny, personally, I don't find it very funny... Sorry...
"What if my lines sometimes read awkward?
Ah well, they rhyme; let’s move on forward.
Doesn’t matter if I’m not making sense;
people are free to guess; it adds the suspense."
The first two lines there... I think rhyming is meant for the overall feel and flow of a poem, but just the simple fact that it reads awkward defeats the purpose of rhyming. It kind of destroys the feel or and the flow.
The reader is supposed to 'guess', as you said, but the rhyming is so simple that we don't really have to guess... It just looks like you just want to rhyme and that maybe
"And rhyming is a popular device indeed;
you’ll need to use it if you want to succeed."
it true, but you need to use it in a proper context.
You may have received reviews similar to mine saying your rhyming is forced, and I'm sure you're really tired of it. I can see your frustration in your poem... but it is, as much as it's not nice to hear, very true.
But I do agree that your poems have potential! I'll definately keep a look-out... so good luck with it, and have a nice day. ^^
I have to admit, this particular poem rhymes quite well! I can sense your sarcasm and I can understand how it feels when people critisize your writing like that... but...
"“Your rhymes are forced,” they say,
“and your poems are way, way nay.”
But I know these people are wrong;
I have style and talent all along."
Well.. um.. I guess people say that for a reason and not just to beat you down... I agree that you do have style and talent all along, but I have to agree that sometimes, SOMETIMES the rhyming IS forced. I tried to give you some specific parts on how they seem 'forced'...
As in, the words don't really make sense. Like:
"And remember as you’re writing your poem:
don’t ever swallow a Styrofoam."
'Styrofoam' comes out of nowhere. I know it's supposed to rhyme again, and maybe I'm supposed to 'guess' and catch on the 'suspense'... but if it is meant to be vaguely funny, personally, I don't find it very funny... Sorry...
"What if my lines sometimes read awkward?
Ah well, they rhyme; let’s move on forward.
Doesn’t matter if I’m not making sense;
people are free to guess; it adds the suspense."
The first two lines there... I think rhyming is meant for the overall feel and flow of a poem, but just the simple fact that it reads awkward defeats the purpose of rhyming. It kind of destroys the feel or and the flow.
The reader is supposed to 'guess', as you said, but the rhyming is so simple that we don't really have to guess... It just looks like you just want to rhyme and that maybe
"And rhyming is a popular device indeed;
you’ll need to use it if you want to succeed."
it true, but you need to use it in a proper context.
You may have received reviews similar to mine saying your rhyming is forced, and I'm sure you're really tired of it. I can see your frustration in your poem... but it is, as much as it's not nice to hear, very true.
But I do agree that your poems have potential! I'll definately keep a look-out... so good luck with it, and have a nice day. ^^
1/14/2006 c1 14kit feral
Look, normally I wouldn't bother, but I have to stop this. For the love of god, please leave bleed away her rejection alone. I know her well and you're seriously hurting her. Maybe her responces aren't the most mature, but from what I gather, you're older than her... come on, just let her be. You're making her want to give up writing all together and that's not what FictionPress is for. None of us are pros here. We're here to help each other. If you don't like her stuff, don't read it. Just don't crush her.
By the way, I'm a bad speller, I'm fifteen and think for the most part I'm mature, and I live for romance. Go ahead, hate me. The feeling's mutal.
Come over and flame me if you like, I really don't care. Your opinion couldn't matter less to me.
(As for your poem- kinda funny, I guess. Kind of pointless. But I liked the last stanza.)
14kit feralLook, normally I wouldn't bother, but I have to stop this. For the love of god, please leave bleed away her rejection alone. I know her well and you're seriously hurting her. Maybe her responces aren't the most mature, but from what I gather, you're older than her... come on, just let her be. You're making her want to give up writing all together and that's not what FictionPress is for. None of us are pros here. We're here to help each other. If you don't like her stuff, don't read it. Just don't crush her.
By the way, I'm a bad speller, I'm fifteen and think for the most part I'm mature, and I live for romance. Go ahead, hate me. The feeling's mutal.
Come over and flame me if you like, I really don't care. Your opinion couldn't matter less to me.
(As for your poem- kinda funny, I guess. Kind of pointless. But I liked the last stanza.)
1/14/2006 c1 79Ashes.to.Acid
I'm assuming this is sarcasm, and very poorly done too. I know you read and criticize other people's poetry, you'll probably do it to mine too now. I don't care. Let me just leave you with this, improve your writing before you harp on anyone else's.
79Ashes.to.AcidI'm assuming this is sarcasm, and very poorly done too. I know you read and criticize other people's poetry, you'll probably do it to mine too now. I don't care. Let me just leave you with this, improve your writing before you harp on anyone else's.