for scent of perfect10/4/2009 c1 
2Sea Dreams And Moonbeams
Your choice of imagery is spectacular. I love the honeysuckle in the first line because it immediately employs the olfactory senses of the reader. And the next stanza with the yin and yang horizon line has such a graceful simplicity to it. I think anyone reading this poem is thinking of a certain person in their life and their scent. I want this poem in a bottle. lol.
And the last two lines are only too true.
2Sea Dreams And MoonbeamsYour choice of imagery is spectacular. I love the honeysuckle in the first line because it immediately employs the olfactory senses of the reader. And the next stanza with the yin and yang horizon line has such a graceful simplicity to it. I think anyone reading this poem is thinking of a certain person in their life and their scent. I want this poem in a bottle. lol.
And the last two lines are only too true.
7/20/2009 c1 1tonight we bloom
This one has GORGEOUS description!
Especially the first stanza, I loved it!
Keep up the good work.
1tonight we bloomThis one has GORGEOUS description!
Especially the first stanza, I loved it!
Keep up the good work.
5/1/2006 c1 19Icatora
*Laughs* I love the poem! It's detailed, descriptive and full of lovely imagery, makes me laugh at the end. Oh so true, those boys and their axe. Lovely.
19Icatora*Laughs* I love the poem! It's detailed, descriptive and full of lovely imagery, makes me laugh at the end. Oh so true, those boys and their axe. Lovely.
4/8/2006 c1 50ScarletDreamer
That was so sweet, and then it just got funny, but it was still sweet! Heehee. Aww...I love this poem. You're a great writer :) Keep up the amazing work!
50ScarletDreamerThat was so sweet, and then it just got funny, but it was still sweet! Heehee. Aww...I love this poem. You're a great writer :) Keep up the amazing work!
3/13/2006 c1 73Jezsh
m how gorgeous. I loved best the 3rd and 4th stanzas. So evocative, lustful and loving, yearning and rejoicing. Great piece.
73Jezshm how gorgeous. I loved best the 3rd and 4th stanzas. So evocative, lustful and loving, yearning and rejoicing. Great piece.
2/12/2006 c1 24Sarah-Brighteyes
What great imagery here... the descriptions of a boy becoming a man in subtle ways is amazing. At least that is the picture I got in my mind.
I loved the lines, "he smells like the hundred acre wood,thick musk swimming in your nosenatural, wild, freeman in paris,man in the forest,tarzan in the jungle"
Beautiful... from boy to man... from innocence to the exotic. Erotic piece.
Great writing Lover.
Bravo.
24Sarah-BrighteyesWhat great imagery here... the descriptions of a boy becoming a man in subtle ways is amazing. At least that is the picture I got in my mind.
I loved the lines, "he smells like the hundred acre wood,thick musk swimming in your nosenatural, wild, freeman in paris,man in the forest,tarzan in the jungle"
Beautiful... from boy to man... from innocence to the exotic. Erotic piece.
Great writing Lover.
Bravo.
2/3/2006 c1 boob
heartsthelastline.
finally: a line of poetry i understand and can relate to.
heartsthelastline.
finally: a line of poetry i understand and can relate to.
1/23/2006 c1 60finger on the trigger
oh. i fell in love. in love with the last line: "make it last before he puts on axe". it made me smile & chuckle inside. & the smells...ah the smells! you sure make me wonder.
60finger on the triggeroh. i fell in love. in love with the last line: "make it last before he puts on axe". it made me smile & chuckle inside. & the smells...ah the smells! you sure make me wonder.
1/23/2006 c1 14Love in the Roses
I shouldn't review this cause I don't have words. But I want to.
It is so, so, so, so beautiful, sad, contradictory, thought provoking, natural, TRUE.
MY fave lines are:he smells like a manthe smell of a man on a boy &yin and yang horizon linethe curve of the world
Damn, you're awesome!
14Love in the RosesI shouldn't review this cause I don't have words. But I want to.
It is so, so, so, so beautiful, sad, contradictory, thought provoking, natural, TRUE.
MY fave lines are:he smells like a manthe smell of a man on a boy &yin and yang horizon linethe curve of the world
Damn, you're awesome!
1/22/2006 c1 the naked civil servant
oh... "yin and yang horizon linethe curve of the world". this was SO AMAZING, beautiful, empathic, sad, regretful, quiet, euphoric, mesmerizing... "he smells like under the covers"...
oh... "yin and yang horizon linethe curve of the world". this was SO AMAZING, beautiful, empathic, sad, regretful, quiet, euphoric, mesmerizing... "he smells like under the covers"...
1/15/2006 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
I loved the organic beauty of this - you actually made the feel of summer into a poem, I applaud you. “Yin and yang horizon line” I love that line! “Man in Paris, man in the forest,” I like the condition of that line - when you think of men in Paris you think of black clothed lovers with smooth hands (or at least I do) lovers who love you more with words and caresses. Where as men in forests are primal, lust filled, throw you up against a tree kind of love. I think though, that in all men there is both versions, some more showy then others but usually both. And I liked the way that you ended it as well; his natural scent before he did anything to himself to change it. The natural pungent odor that makes all us girls stand up and take notice. Wonderful piece, I loved it. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietI loved the organic beauty of this - you actually made the feel of summer into a poem, I applaud you. “Yin and yang horizon line” I love that line! “Man in Paris, man in the forest,” I like the condition of that line - when you think of men in Paris you think of black clothed lovers with smooth hands (or at least I do) lovers who love you more with words and caresses. Where as men in forests are primal, lust filled, throw you up against a tree kind of love. I think though, that in all men there is both versions, some more showy then others but usually both. And I liked the way that you ended it as well; his natural scent before he did anything to himself to change it. The natural pungent odor that makes all us girls stand up and take notice. Wonderful piece, I loved it. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.