for Coffee House Blues6/22/2006 c1 
123Black and White Dreams
This is sweet! I love the first stanza. Beautiful job.
*::~Cat~::*
123Black and White DreamsThis is sweet! I love the first stanza. Beautiful job.
*::~Cat~::*
6/2/2006 c1 3Leo Eigenmann
Wow, the topic seems surreal and the choice of words as well. I like your directness in poetry writing.
3Leo EigenmannWow, the topic seems surreal and the choice of words as well. I like your directness in poetry writing.
2/26/2006 c1 612simpleplan13
I love the whole coffee house thing.. it's unique and awesome I love the artificial sweetness thing... very well done
612simpleplan13I love the whole coffee house thing.. it's unique and awesome I love the artificial sweetness thing... very well done
2/16/2006 c1 75Carp
"The world spins with the swirl of your spoon Dispersing sweetness (artificial of course)"
A metaphor...and so true. You don't use too much description, but just enough so the reader and let his/her imagination run through. :)
75Carp"The world spins with the swirl of your spoon Dispersing sweetness (artificial of course)"
A metaphor...and so true. You don't use too much description, but just enough so the reader and let his/her imagination run through. :)
2/13/2006 c1 31button-nose
i love the idea behind this...my fav was: teacup clatter of faceless strangers...i felt it really set the mood for this and definitly painted a picture in my mind. I love it well done!
button nose x x
31button-nosei love the idea behind this...my fav was: teacup clatter of faceless strangers...i felt it really set the mood for this and definitly painted a picture in my mind. I love it well done!
button nose x x
1/21/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
Now this makes me hungry. I love the first stanza and 'teacup clatter of faceless strangers' You can really imagine the setting in this. Well done
144chaos called creationNow this makes me hungry. I love the first stanza and 'teacup clatter of faceless strangers' You can really imagine the setting in this. Well done
1/20/2006 c1 237classic violet
Wow. Symbolic. Mesmerizing.
"Teacup clatter of faceless strangers"
That just made my day. That line was so... just, amazing. Unbelievabley amazing. Great job!
237classic violetWow. Symbolic. Mesmerizing.
"Teacup clatter of faceless strangers"
That just made my day. That line was so... just, amazing. Unbelievabley amazing. Great job!
1/20/2006 c1 49shinku-kitsune
You said a lot but left a lot to the imagination - this poem could mean a number of things to different people, I think, but it still retains the mournful undertone. ^_^ I liked it.
49shinku-kitsuneYou said a lot but left a lot to the imagination - this poem could mean a number of things to different people, I think, but it still retains the mournful undertone. ^_^ I liked it.
1/14/2006 c1 53diesoz
I know the feeling you're talking about. We have a "coffee house" thing at our school once a month and that's about how I feel. It's really good. I like it a lot.
53diesozI know the feeling you're talking about. We have a "coffee house" thing at our school once a month and that's about how I feel. It's really good. I like it a lot.
1/14/2006 c1 194Aslan Israel
M tasty... I do so love my coffee. And I love the image you present here; just lovely.
194Aslan IsraelM tasty... I do so love my coffee. And I love the image you present here; just lovely.
1/14/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
i liked the images that spring up from this poem~ it has almost a slight jazzy feel to it~ good work
keep writing!
132mizu no kokoroi liked the images that spring up from this poem~ it has almost a slight jazzy feel to it~ good work
keep writing!