for a visualized scream1/31/2006 c1 
73Jezsh
Fascinating, morbid piece. I like how the body is taken down layer by layer through the poem until there are only bleached bones and emptiness left. Unusual powerful imagery, nice work.
73JezshFascinating, morbid piece. I like how the body is taken down layer by layer through the poem until there are only bleached bones and emptiness left. Unusual powerful imagery, nice work.
1/23/2006 c1 hmm something
Your poem sounds so much like a nightmare, live and playing 'fore the audience's eyes, with the parenthesis and breaks and descriptions. Horrific and all 'round nice (the writing style, not the visuals - that's just morbidly fascinating).
- Chace
Your poem sounds so much like a nightmare, live and playing 'fore the audience's eyes, with the parenthesis and breaks and descriptions. Horrific and all 'round nice (the writing style, not the visuals - that's just morbidly fascinating).
- Chace
1/22/2006 c1 236mezzie
those are some visually hard, slightly horrific, very anatomically specific descriptions... i would not want this for a dream e
mezzie
236mezziethose are some visually hard, slightly horrific, very anatomically specific descriptions... i would not want this for a dream e
mezzie
1/15/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
The action, flow of this is remarkable. So many scatterred images and thoughts. A combination of dream-like haze and amazing sensativity to all sensations. Wonderfully written.
879Moondog DozierThe action, flow of this is remarkable. So many scatterred images and thoughts. A combination of dream-like haze and amazing sensativity to all sensations. Wonderfully written.