for EQUAL: Season I2/5/2007 c13 
28TolkienLover
I apparently haven't been keeping up with the story, as I didn't know about Sam and Sean's parents or about Joel, but it does seem like you have made a lot of improvement on your dialog. The thing I don't understand in this episode is the fighting between Sam and Sean, but maybe if I go back and read the last episode I'll figure it out. Great job with the suspense - I like how there are two subplots in this one and can't wait to see how they connect (werewolves who can only be killed by decapitation and the Headless Horseman decapitating people can't just be a coincidence I'm guessing?).
28TolkienLoverI apparently haven't been keeping up with the story, as I didn't know about Sam and Sean's parents or about Joel, but it does seem like you have made a lot of improvement on your dialog. The thing I don't understand in this episode is the fighting between Sam and Sean, but maybe if I go back and read the last episode I'll figure it out. Great job with the suspense - I like how there are two subplots in this one and can't wait to see how they connect (werewolves who can only be killed by decapitation and the Headless Horseman decapitating people can't just be a coincidence I'm guessing?).
7/27/2006 c12 2DCI Panda
nice job, as usual! I was the climax was a little dissapointing, but whatever. Hope you are having a good summer!Ta!
2DCI Pandanice job, as usual! I was the climax was a little dissapointing, but whatever. Hope you are having a good summer!Ta!
7/7/2006 c11 DCI Panda
Ew!Well, that was interesting, but really, really, really gross! When you said the title was meat, this was not the type of meat I was thinking about! Good job, keep writing!
Ew!Well, that was interesting, but really, really, really gross! When you said the title was meat, this was not the type of meat I was thinking about! Good job, keep writing!
5/23/2006 c6 redheadedrant
Okay, pretty nice. I thought the whole ball of elements thing was corny until i got the symbolism. othr than that great. Oh, one more thing:"Sam reached down and picked up the rifle. The man in the black mask, at the sight of the rifle, began to run at Sam. Sam pulled the trigger once, blood sprayed from the man’s body. Twice, another explosion of blood. Three times, yet another hole opened in the chest of the man. Four times, the man’s face exploded in firework of crimson. His body, covered in blood, fell to the ground. It leaked blood onto the floor mixing with the blood of his other victims." Holy crap, man! Something wrong with you?
Okay, pretty nice. I thought the whole ball of elements thing was corny until i got the symbolism. othr than that great. Oh, one more thing:"Sam reached down and picked up the rifle. The man in the black mask, at the sight of the rifle, began to run at Sam. Sam pulled the trigger once, blood sprayed from the man’s body. Twice, another explosion of blood. Three times, yet another hole opened in the chest of the man. Four times, the man’s face exploded in firework of crimson. His body, covered in blood, fell to the ground. It leaked blood onto the floor mixing with the blood of his other victims." Holy crap, man! Something wrong with you?
5/20/2006 c10 DCI Panda
oh! Nice job! That was great, with Cleopatra being able to take on different forms... very creative. I can't wait to see who this Joel guy really is! Good Job!
oh! Nice job! That was great, with Cleopatra being able to take on different forms... very creative. I can't wait to see who this Joel guy really is! Good Job!
4/28/2006 c9 WickedWitticism
EQUAL: Season 1 has got me hooked. I love the idea of writing it like a television show; with Episodes rather than Chapters. I do wonder where they get all the money to stay in motels/hotels throughout their journey though. Great storyline, lots of action, fantastic characters and, all in all, a wonderful story. Keep it up!
EQUAL: Season 1 has got me hooked. I love the idea of writing it like a television show; with Episodes rather than Chapters. I do wonder where they get all the money to stay in motels/hotels throughout their journey though. Great storyline, lots of action, fantastic characters and, all in all, a wonderful story. Keep it up!
4/14/2006 c9 DCI Panda
nice job! nice way of jerking the reader around with the Dean/Tom thing. Overall good job!
nice job! nice way of jerking the reader around with the Dean/Tom thing. Overall good job!
4/10/2006 c8 express
wow, it just keeps developing. I always wondered what it was that caused bad things, and you attempted an answer.
wow, it just keeps developing. I always wondered what it was that caused bad things, and you attempted an answer.
4/9/2006 c8 DCI Panda
very nice, with the new demon, it'll be interesting to see where you take that. I like the mionr charecter, and Lisa's funny; Comic relief (does that means she dies early on? JK) Nice job, overall. Have a nice week!
very nice, with the new demon, it'll be interesting to see where you take that. I like the mionr charecter, and Lisa's funny; Comic relief (does that means she dies early on? JK) Nice job, overall. Have a nice week!
4/3/2006 c7 28TolkienLover
Wow. just wow. Every time I start to think the demons are going to be less interesting and more predictable, you surprise me with something unexpected! Can't wait to see what Anarchy is capable of, and how he will be defeated! I hope you don't make me wait too long for the next episode!
28TolkienLoverWow. just wow. Every time I start to think the demons are going to be less interesting and more predictable, you surprise me with something unexpected! Can't wait to see what Anarchy is capable of, and how he will be defeated! I hope you don't make me wait too long for the next episode!
4/3/2006 c6 TolkienLover
What took you so long to put up the new episode? LOL j/k. The flashback scene took me by surprise, and it seemed very Tolkienesque :-P Oh, and the part where the ball of light was going back and forth between the saint and Cleopatra reminded me a lot of the end of Harry Potter 4 where Harry is fighting Voldemort... hehe but that's a good thing, its not plagiarism or anything if you are influenced by great writers like Tolkien and J.K.Rowling! Anyways, the ending was satisfactory as Sam finally escaped and is now recovering (thank goodness) and the revelation about Ben's dad is thought-provoking to say the least. Going to read episode 7 now!
What took you so long to put up the new episode? LOL j/k. The flashback scene took me by surprise, and it seemed very Tolkienesque :-P Oh, and the part where the ball of light was going back and forth between the saint and Cleopatra reminded me a lot of the end of Harry Potter 4 where Harry is fighting Voldemort... hehe but that's a good thing, its not plagiarism or anything if you are influenced by great writers like Tolkien and J.K.Rowling! Anyways, the ending was satisfactory as Sam finally escaped and is now recovering (thank goodness) and the revelation about Ben's dad is thought-provoking to say the least. Going to read episode 7 now!
4/2/2006 c7 2DCI Panda
oh the plot deepens! It was nice to meet the saint, and he can read minds. way cool. That gray gloug thing was crazy, but in a good way. Glad that the computer is working again!
2DCI Pandaoh the plot deepens! It was nice to meet the saint, and he can read minds. way cool. That gray gloug thing was crazy, but in a good way. Glad that the computer is working again!
4/2/2006 c6 DCI Panda
ah! They are here! Yay! This seccond part was really good. I liked the battle scene a lot. That was cool, with the angel and demon battle. nice job. Now I gotta read the next chapter...
ah! They are here! Yay! This seccond part was really good. I liked the battle scene a lot. That was cool, with the angel and demon battle. nice job. Now I gotta read the next chapter...
4/1/2006 c5 express
GIRL POWER!I love the fact that you illustrate that girls can do anything that they put their minds to.
GIRL POWER!I love the fact that you illustrate that girls can do anything that they put their minds to.
3/12/2006 c1 express
wow! Love the plot line, always intense and the development of the characters is good. But what I think would be awesome is if the amazingly perfct blonde girl and Sam have a relationship.
wow! Love the plot line, always intense and the development of the characters is good. But what I think would be awesome is if the amazingly perfct blonde girl and Sam have a relationship.