for Reflections2/1/2006 c1 
70Maisha Mafuriko
Just a tear drop...one after another..just one tear drop...then...another..into the glass of life...till one day the glass overflows as the tears pour forth.
70Maisha MafurikoJust a tear drop...one after another..just one tear drop...then...another..into the glass of life...till one day the glass overflows as the tears pour forth.
1/18/2006 c1 32In State of Agony
just great...( when i read the final line i just, WOW!) "We used to laugh in champagne kisses" "Messages print into my mind" "I crush the notes then iron them smooth" lovely,and then, the final line...perfect just perfect...i really really like this peace, you are good, keep it writing...
32In State of Agonyjust great...( when i read the final line i just, WOW!) "We used to laugh in champagne kisses" "Messages print into my mind" "I crush the notes then iron them smooth" lovely,and then, the final line...perfect just perfect...i really really like this peace, you are good, keep it writing...
1/17/2006 c1 14white-chokolat
poor thing...happened to me before...oh she was b-e-autiful but hey...you move on to find BETTER things
14white-chokolatpoor thing...happened to me before...oh she was b-e-autiful but hey...you move on to find BETTER things
1/17/2006 c1 127Eirien
I really like this, especially the way the speaker's conflict of feelings towards that other person is expressed in the last two lines.
127EirienI really like this, especially the way the speaker's conflict of feelings towards that other person is expressed in the last two lines.
1/16/2006 c1 31button-nose
wow... i really enjoyed this... i loved : messages print into my mind...sepia tones negatives of glazed lips... i also loved chapagne kisses...
I thought your use of imagery was excellent. we all experience heartache and heartbreak, but this felt like it wasnt just your ordinary sad love story poem.. i really enjoyed it...great work!
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31button-nosewow... i really enjoyed this... i loved : messages print into my mind...sepia tones negatives of glazed lips... i also loved chapagne kisses...
I thought your use of imagery was excellent. we all experience heartache and heartbreak, but this felt like it wasnt just your ordinary sad love story poem.. i really enjoyed it...great work!
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1/16/2006 c1 1dragonwarrior2017
Hm...I don't really know what to say about this one. I like it and I don't. If that makes any kind of stupid sense.
1dragonwarrior2017Hm...I don't really know what to say about this one. I like it and I don't. If that makes any kind of stupid sense.
1/15/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
You know that when you read the first line that this would be truly heartbreaking. This is very beautiful and I hope you feel better soon. 'plenty fish in the sea'
144chaos called creationYou know that when you read the first line that this would be truly heartbreaking. This is very beautiful and I hope you feel better soon. 'plenty fish in the sea'
1/15/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
" I crush the notes then iron them smooth", that is extraordinary. The whole work, especially the voice presented were great, but that line was extraordinary.
879Moondog Dozier" I crush the notes then iron them smooth", that is extraordinary. The whole work, especially the voice presented were great, but that line was extraordinary.
1/15/2006 c1 8WannaBeABarrelRacer
wow. thats really good! i love it!, and again, thanks for the review! ttyl~Em
8WannaBeABarrelRacerwow. thats really good! i love it!, and again, thanks for the review! ttyl~Em
1/15/2006 c1 32Morx
I thought this was stunning - real palpable emotion and realism. (I can very much indentify with it right now). Anyway, just... lovely.
32MorxI thought this was stunning - real palpable emotion and realism. (I can very much indentify with it right now). Anyway, just... lovely.
1/15/2006 c1 Galadh Niniel
Powerful piece, I love it, such beautiful descriptions. I like the way you use the physical details to show indirectly how the two persons don't fit together any more. Especially the line "I crush the notes then iron them smooth" is wonderful, it shows how the speaker wants to forget and let go the other person yet still clings to them. Great poem.
Powerful piece, I love it, such beautiful descriptions. I like the way you use the physical details to show indirectly how the two persons don't fit together any more. Especially the line "I crush the notes then iron them smooth" is wonderful, it shows how the speaker wants to forget and let go the other person yet still clings to them. Great poem.
1/15/2006 c1 18Tikklz
I really liked a lot of the imagery, and the hurt was very apparent. "sepia tone negatives of glazed bright lips" was my fav. line
18TikklzI really liked a lot of the imagery, and the hurt was very apparent. "sepia tone negatives of glazed bright lips" was my fav. line
1/15/2006 c1 31bjw
I thought it was very well done. The imagery..your metaphors are really original! The emotions they rouse...just beautiful. The reader can empathise very well. "I crush the notes then iron them smooth/You said you loved me." The ending is perfect..you can almost hear the narrator's voice break. Love it.:)
But I think in "sepia tone negatives of glazed bright lips", the "tone" would be better as "toned".
Lovely writing. One reason to perhaps..not feel so sorry for yourself.:)
31bjwI thought it was very well done. The imagery..your metaphors are really original! The emotions they rouse...just beautiful. The reader can empathise very well. "I crush the notes then iron them smooth/You said you loved me." The ending is perfect..you can almost hear the narrator's voice break. Love it.:)
But I think in "sepia tone negatives of glazed bright lips", the "tone" would be better as "toned".
Lovely writing. One reason to perhaps..not feel so sorry for yourself.:)