for Ice Heart2/15/2006 c1 
22Charrbin
That last line seems really out of rhythm. Try using structured poems, like a set amount of syllables and rhyming schemes. But you probably know that with all your poems...
Free verse can be hard to, and I feel it's best to just do longer lines with it. Your poem has rhymes, though, so it's not really free verse, but it reads like one. Make up your mind next time! :P
22CharrbinThat last line seems really out of rhythm. Try using structured poems, like a set amount of syllables and rhyming schemes. But you probably know that with all your poems...
Free verse can be hard to, and I feel it's best to just do longer lines with it. Your poem has rhymes, though, so it's not really free verse, but it reads like one. Make up your mind next time! :P