for hey you, dead guy4/17/2006 c1 
13iabandonedthisname
cute.
& no, no failed realtionships. It was a parody. Guess you missed it.
13iabandonedthisnamecute.
& no, no failed realtionships. It was a parody. Guess you missed it.
2/2/2006 c1 19wonderland is different now
Zwyn (i seriously doubt that's your name, but oh well)-
okay look. I DONT consider constructive criticism as flames. because they are helping me. all i can say is to you, thanks for the CONSTRUCTIVE criticism of the last review, but since it was adorned with sarcasm, i can't exactly say i loved it. the 'heaven forbids I add "-yet"' please. i'm not that bad. that isn't my usual style anyway. i just write on here when i'm feeling down, or something. on the other hand, i have an account on another website, and one store has 308 reviews, which is probably far more than mine and yours on here added together. not because you're bad. you're pretty good. it's because more people go on the other website. *shrugs* thats all. i usually don't try to be depressing; i usually write a mix of comedy/romance which people seem to like, i guess, more than what i write now. but thanks for the criticism. and i have to say...my three author's notes? they're like you're two paragraphs at the top of you're profile. please. take them OFF. many people will think you're stuck up (you certainly have enough sarcasm to be, but i don't know) and won't want to review. and the age thing: 'old, and therefore wise. so pay attention to everyword i say'. that too. that's all. also...i saw that you sorta have a lot of flames from other people who didn't like how you were criticizing them. i think it would also help if their's was constructive too.
ta-ta!
~melissa
19wonderland is different nowZwyn (i seriously doubt that's your name, but oh well)-
okay look. I DONT consider constructive criticism as flames. because they are helping me. all i can say is to you, thanks for the CONSTRUCTIVE criticism of the last review, but since it was adorned with sarcasm, i can't exactly say i loved it. the 'heaven forbids I add "-yet"' please. i'm not that bad. that isn't my usual style anyway. i just write on here when i'm feeling down, or something. on the other hand, i have an account on another website, and one store has 308 reviews, which is probably far more than mine and yours on here added together. not because you're bad. you're pretty good. it's because more people go on the other website. *shrugs* thats all. i usually don't try to be depressing; i usually write a mix of comedy/romance which people seem to like, i guess, more than what i write now. but thanks for the criticism. and i have to say...my three author's notes? they're like you're two paragraphs at the top of you're profile. please. take them OFF. many people will think you're stuck up (you certainly have enough sarcasm to be, but i don't know) and won't want to review. and the age thing: 'old, and therefore wise. so pay attention to everyword i say'. that too. that's all. also...i saw that you sorta have a lot of flames from other people who didn't like how you were criticizing them. i think it would also help if their's was constructive too.
ta-ta!
~melissa
1/25/2006 c1 4LovingTarquine
Hey. Pretty good angst ya got goin on here. Though I don't especially agree with your feelings towards troubled and suicidal people, I do agree that someone should work through their problems instead of taking the easier, albeit difficult in itself, path. In any case, perhaps if you checked your capatalization this would be a lot better.
Great work. 7/10
4LovingTarquineHey. Pretty good angst ya got goin on here. Though I don't especially agree with your feelings towards troubled and suicidal people, I do agree that someone should work through their problems instead of taking the easier, albeit difficult in itself, path. In any case, perhaps if you checked your capatalization this would be a lot better.
Great work. 7/10
1/19/2006 c1 32In State of Agony
m, maybe the best you got here, i like this i cant say i dont, very personal and you dont make a single weird rhym, i like that, u have ur merits, its very powerfull...
by the way, ThIs Is nO IlEgAl and never will be, for the record, you dont have to follow a pattern...AnD i CaN wRiTe as i wish...
m, u was right in one thing, the poem, it was to long m i really dont realized that before...i already change it...so thanx m and keep writing things like this...
remember excessive and forced rhyms can destroy a god idea or poem
This Word Is ((In State Of AgonY))
32In State of Agonym, maybe the best you got here, i like this i cant say i dont, very personal and you dont make a single weird rhym, i like that, u have ur merits, its very powerfull...
by the way, ThIs Is nO IlEgAl and never will be, for the record, you dont have to follow a pattern...AnD i CaN wRiTe as i wish...
m, u was right in one thing, the poem, it was to long m i really dont realized that before...i already change it...so thanx m and keep writing things like this...
remember excessive and forced rhyms can destroy a god idea or poem
This Word Is ((In State Of AgonY))