12/21/2006 c22 uusernname
Wow great story, can't wait for the next chapter!

12/20/2006 c22 2Arej
Wow, well...I'm reviewing. I totally meant to review on one of the earlier chapters - well, all of the earlier chapters - but I'll shamelessly admit that I was hooked and I had to keep reading. Now off of my fan ramblings here...

I definitely like the way that Delilah is real. You take her life from an up to a down and around like that, just the way life really is. You didn't make her brother come back completely fixed; instead he relapsed, realistically.

You made real people with real emotions - Ace, who seems to care about Delilah in his own strange way; Derek, who although he is a complete bastard for what he did, and the other thing he possibly did, cares for Delilah; James, torn between his brother and his friend, who was there for her when her original friends seemed to be no refuge but eventually proved that blood bonds are closer than friendship; and Andrew, who moved from one girl to another, gave in to blackmail, and struggled with his secret love as anyone is prone to do when it's their best friend they're in love with. Of course there are others - they're all real (and by real I mean realistic, I certainly would not be surprised to meet these people on the street) - and I think it takes some serious skill to accomplish that.

Looking at this as a writer and not a reader, it has the complexities that might make it into a published work (I think it'd be great published, but who knows about the publishing houses and their weird ways?) that will capture and hold the attention of the readers. Looking at this as a reader and maybe even a writer, this is something I would totally want on my bookshelf if it were to be published one day down the line.

As any work is prone to, it can be tweaked and improved on in a few places, but nothing comes immediately to mind. One thing is that if it ever is published, the POV would cause an issue - on FP that's fine, if sometimes a bit distracting, that you switch from POV to POV, but unfortunately that'd be an obstacle to get around.

I like what you have here and I certainly want to follow it. As a closet romance reader - yes, I'll admit it, I read romance occasionally - this is something I'll keep with. And I'll keep with it because it has substance beyond the romance - it has a story, it has a vibrancy you don't find in fluff fiction. And I like it, a lot.

I found my emotions swinging with what you wrote, and I blame it equally on both the power of your words and my susceptibility to the emotion of your characters. But think of it this way - I could never have been swayed from one end to the other if the emotion hadn't left the screen to affect me. And that was all you.

BB- Arej

12/19/2006 c15 Ache
lol aw i wanted her with ace, maybe Chris from Baskin Robins will be the next? lol no but i think you need to come up with something other then her walking in someone with another girl lol. I swear that girl is like walking-in-on-other-people-making-out magnet

11/28/2006 c1 3Break dance not hearts
Darling its amazing.

::Kaitlyn talking

11/21/2006 c21 insta111
I think the word is biased, mi'lady.

DELILAH! I keep thinking of you when I hear that name now!

11/16/2006 c21 3hopeless-flame
oh. no rape-attack in question? (drum rolls) (sigh) ah. drama. its what keeps life spinning...

11/14/2006 c21 Hana
confused...

11/14/2006 c21 euphorictragedy
Wow, I love this story! Seriously, I stayed up about an hour passed my "bed time" to read most of it. I had to force myself to go to bed and finish it today.