for Mood Rings11/1/2006 c20 
4Right or Ryn
And a cliff hanger. pooh. Well, can't wait to let the drama unfold. One of the sub-categories needs to be moved to drama because even if it wasn't planned to be in the beginning it definitely is a drama story now.
4Right or RynAnd a cliff hanger. pooh. Well, can't wait to let the drama unfold. One of the sub-categories needs to be moved to drama because even if it wasn't planned to be in the beginning it definitely is a drama story now.
11/1/2006 c19 Right or Ryn
Okay, some of my previous complaints have been resolved now that I'm closer to the last updated chapter.
I find it kind of funny that she can forgive Derek but not Ace. Derek raped her and Ace only cheated on her. I'm not saying that cheating isn't bad but if you'd go out in the street and ask 100 people if they'd rather be cheated on or raped, 100 would say cheated on. I stand firm in my opinion that she shouldn't have forgiven either of them.
Finally she gets with Drew. Now, lets see how long it will last. Usually its always the build up to the romance that's the exciting part. All the drama and whatnot. Does he like me? Does she go out with him? But didn't they kiss at the dance? I thought they hooked up! Now my heart is completely broken and smashed into a million jillion bazillion pieces. Let's see how long they can stay together before the drama starts aflowing.
Okay, some of my previous complaints have been resolved now that I'm closer to the last updated chapter.
I find it kind of funny that she can forgive Derek but not Ace. Derek raped her and Ace only cheated on her. I'm not saying that cheating isn't bad but if you'd go out in the street and ask 100 people if they'd rather be cheated on or raped, 100 would say cheated on. I stand firm in my opinion that she shouldn't have forgiven either of them.
Finally she gets with Drew. Now, lets see how long it will last. Usually its always the build up to the romance that's the exciting part. All the drama and whatnot. Does he like me? Does she go out with him? But didn't they kiss at the dance? I thought they hooked up! Now my heart is completely broken and smashed into a million jillion bazillion pieces. Let's see how long they can stay together before the drama starts aflowing.
11/1/2006 c16 Right or Ryn
Del is just way too forgiving to be believeable. Forgiving her brother is understandable, he's her brother and she's had four years to deal. But Derek? Um, yeah. No way. It can't have been at most more than two weeks since homecoming. She let him get away with that, "Oh I'm such a bad person" lets all go have a pity party. And then he gives the lame I was drunk excuse. Doing something stupid while your drunk is okay but raping somebody is crossing the line by a gazillion miles.
Oh and last chapter you had Forest come back. And you had a Jennie. Forest and Jennie. Forest Gump. Ha. Where is Jen-nie? (Did the pizza ever come?)
Del is just way too forgiving to be believeable. Forgiving her brother is understandable, he's her brother and she's had four years to deal. But Derek? Um, yeah. No way. It can't have been at most more than two weeks since homecoming. She let him get away with that, "Oh I'm such a bad person" lets all go have a pity party. And then he gives the lame I was drunk excuse. Doing something stupid while your drunk is okay but raping somebody is crossing the line by a gazillion miles.
Oh and last chapter you had Forest come back. And you had a Jennie. Forest and Jennie. Forest Gump. Ha. Where is Jen-nie? (Did the pizza ever come?)
11/1/2006 c13 Right or Ryn
Hey again. I'm going to be a bitch and complain so sorry in advance if I hurt your feelings.
Delilah always complains about how average she is and how she needs tons of makeup to look average pretty. She's said before that she doesn't wear a lot of makeup but then later you've listed the products she does use on a daily basis, and while its not an "I have a friggin mask on face" lot it certainly isn't the amount most people would say is a little bit. Then she has to continue going on about how she's only average, blah de blah and yet she has the most popular guy in school (aka Mr. I hit you and you do nothing about it guy), Ace the super hot brother of new guy best friend (I love Will and Grace, do you watch?), and rich hot basketball playing friend all chasing after her. Actually Ace's vote is still on the rocks but it sounds better if I go ahead and say it.
alright, ta ta for now.
Hey again. I'm going to be a bitch and complain so sorry in advance if I hurt your feelings.
Delilah always complains about how average she is and how she needs tons of makeup to look average pretty. She's said before that she doesn't wear a lot of makeup but then later you've listed the products she does use on a daily basis, and while its not an "I have a friggin mask on face" lot it certainly isn't the amount most people would say is a little bit. Then she has to continue going on about how she's only average, blah de blah and yet she has the most popular guy in school (aka Mr. I hit you and you do nothing about it guy), Ace the super hot brother of new guy best friend (I love Will and Grace, do you watch?), and rich hot basketball playing friend all chasing after her. Actually Ace's vote is still on the rocks but it sounds better if I go ahead and say it.
alright, ta ta for now.
11/1/2006 c12 Right or Ryn
Haha, that's funny. I know you mentioned it before but, ha. My half brother lives in Montana, honest to God. I love it.
Haha, that's funny. I know you mentioned it before but, ha. My half brother lives in Montana, honest to God. I love it.
11/1/2006 c11 Right or Ryn
Hey there. Saw your story, started reading, so now the next step in the process is to drop in a review. Alright, where to start? I'm in a not so good mood right now so all your going to get is criticism, I don't feel like handing out complements.
It does not seem believeable at all that Del would stay with Derek after he hit her not to mention almost raped her. Not only did she not do something about the situation, she didn't try and avoid him at school or tell him to leave her alone. Nothing. No, what she does is let him kiss her at her doorway and bully and blackmail her friend. I don't have much sympathy for her. You write Del going, no I'm not an emo but my mood is black yadda yadda cry cry tear tear I have no friends but I'm not being emo. Sorry Del, you just think you're not being emo, but in the last couple of chapters you totally are.
Another thing that kind of bothered me was a couple of chapters back when Del went swimming with Drew (do you have a thing for D names Drew (which I know is really Andrew but you call him Drew the most), Del, and Derek). She got in this bathing suit and was too embarassed because she wasn't as skinny as size 00 cheerleaders. Big whoop-d-freakin-doo. She's size 3, and 5'6. In my neck of the woods thats skinny. Her complaining about not wanting to be seen in it because of her being too big ticked me off. I can understand the modesty part. Getting in a string bikini in front of your crush would be nerve-racking to a lot of people. But just realize how she sounds by saying that.
Okay then, on to the next chapter.
Hey there. Saw your story, started reading, so now the next step in the process is to drop in a review. Alright, where to start? I'm in a not so good mood right now so all your going to get is criticism, I don't feel like handing out complements.
It does not seem believeable at all that Del would stay with Derek after he hit her not to mention almost raped her. Not only did she not do something about the situation, she didn't try and avoid him at school or tell him to leave her alone. Nothing. No, what she does is let him kiss her at her doorway and bully and blackmail her friend. I don't have much sympathy for her. You write Del going, no I'm not an emo but my mood is black yadda yadda cry cry tear tear I have no friends but I'm not being emo. Sorry Del, you just think you're not being emo, but in the last couple of chapters you totally are.
Another thing that kind of bothered me was a couple of chapters back when Del went swimming with Drew (do you have a thing for D names Drew (which I know is really Andrew but you call him Drew the most), Del, and Derek). She got in this bathing suit and was too embarassed because she wasn't as skinny as size 00 cheerleaders. Big whoop-d-freakin-doo. She's size 3, and 5'6. In my neck of the woods thats skinny. Her complaining about not wanting to be seen in it because of her being too big ticked me off. I can understand the modesty part. Getting in a string bikini in front of your crush would be nerve-racking to a lot of people. But just realize how she sounds by saying that.
Okay then, on to the next chapter.
11/1/2006 c20 TheTrueBlue41728
Zomg, zomg, zomg. IT'S SO SUSPENSEFUL! I loved reading this chapter, and I hate the suspense! Hurry and write chapter 21!
Zomg, zomg, zomg. IT'S SO SUSPENSEFUL! I loved reading this chapter, and I hate the suspense! Hurry and write chapter 21!
11/1/2006 c20 6Semicharmed love
wow! i loove ur story. i read it all in one sitting. :D anyways, wow her life is like a rollercoaster. up and down and up and down and..yea u get my point. i was like no when i realized that there was no chapter 21 and that i would have to wait to find out wut happens next, so update soon, please? great story!
6Semicharmed lovewow! i loove ur story. i read it all in one sitting. :D anyways, wow her life is like a rollercoaster. up and down and up and down and..yea u get my point. i was like no when i realized that there was no chapter 21 and that i would have to wait to find out wut happens next, so update soon, please? great story!
11/1/2006 c20 3hopeless-flame
OMG. what the heck just happened? accident? post up the next chapter ASAP, okay? =) its getting interesting. oh tragedy!
3hopeless-flameOMG. what the heck just happened? accident? post up the next chapter ASAP, okay? =) its getting interesting. oh tragedy!
9/26/2006 c19 chopsticks27
danielle, this is like my absolute favorite story ever! I love how you incorporated things from school into it!Once i started reading it, i couldnt stop! it was addicting. I dont know if this is supposed to be the last chapter or what, but if there's more...update soon!
~meghan
danielle, this is like my absolute favorite story ever! I love how you incorporated things from school into it!Once i started reading it, i couldnt stop! it was addicting. I dont know if this is supposed to be the last chapter or what, but if there's more...update soon!
~meghan
9/18/2006 c15 2hellohellolove
Urgh. i never thought ace would've done something like that. i knew i shouldn't have trusted him. he looks too much like bill from tokio hotel. and i HATE tokio hotel. screw him.
2hellohelloloveUrgh. i never thought ace would've done something like that. i knew i shouldn't have trusted him. he looks too much like bill from tokio hotel. and i HATE tokio hotel. screw him.