for Conflicted Kisses1/28/2006 c1 superheroesarereal
hm this is good...i especially like this part:"...Lips are quivering to spill a dream...His flower is more than what she seems...And so Light kisses Dark, Pain kisses Relief;Love kisses Hate, and Doubt kisses Belief."That part is very sweet... it makes me think of glass because it seems so fragile, the moment that you're describing, I can almost see the pain in the girl's eyes...it's really descriptive and graphic.. the only thing is that the part in the beginning where you describe the person as an object seems too impersonal...almost to the point of inhumanity...i mean if you're going for that, then that's good, but otherwise it sounds so bitter...hm anyway i love you
hm this is good...i especially like this part:"...Lips are quivering to spill a dream...His flower is more than what she seems...And so Light kisses Dark, Pain kisses Relief;Love kisses Hate, and Doubt kisses Belief."That part is very sweet... it makes me think of glass because it seems so fragile, the moment that you're describing, I can almost see the pain in the girl's eyes...it's really descriptive and graphic.. the only thing is that the part in the beginning where you describe the person as an object seems too impersonal...almost to the point of inhumanity...i mean if you're going for that, then that's good, but otherwise it sounds so bitter...hm anyway i love you